Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like “uh” and redundant phrases. Also correct plural form (scenery is uncountable) and verb forms (watching → watch).

Exemplo: Yes, I do. In Sri Lanka there is abundant greenery, so I often look out the window to enjoy the views. Also, I usually listen to music through my earbuds while I watch, which helps me relax during long journeys.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and coherence: use correct tenses and clearer linking words. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give specific examples (sunsets, clouds) and a brief reason. Remove repetition and fillers. Clarify place names or use general terms if unsure.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos from the car. For example, I photograph sunsets and striking cloud formations because they look dramatic when seen from the road. When I visit places in the south, I also capture wide stretches of green landscape to remember the trip.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (surrounding → surrounded; miss beach → miss the beach) and reduce repetition and fillers. Combine related activities into one concise sentence.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because I live in the hill country surrounded by mountains, so I miss the beach. When I go to the seaside, I enjoy sunbathing, swimming in the sea, and watching the sunset because it feels relaxing and different from my daily environment.

× Of course I do, you know, especially in Sri Lanka, we have a lot of greenery and very beautiful sceneries to watch.

✓ Of course I do, you know, especially in Sri Lanka we have a lot of greenery and very beautiful scenery to watch.

The word 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Use 'scenery' to refer to the landscape in general. Also remove the comma before 'we' to improve sentence flow.

× Uh, I love to listen to some music from my earbuds and watching out the windows when I'm traveling a lot.

✓ Uh, I love to listen to music with my earbuds and watch out the windows when I'm traveling a lot.

After 'love to' the base form of the verb should be used, so use 'watch' not 'watching'. Also use 'listen to music' (no 'some') and 'with my earbuds' is more natural than 'from my earbuds'.

× I have this special interest when it's come to sky.

✓ I have a special interest when it comes to the sky.

The phrase should be 'when it comes to' (present simple) not 'when it's come to'. Also add the article 'the' before 'sky' and use 'a special interest' for natural phrasing.

× Whenever I saw a beautiful sunset, beautiful cloud, I always get photographs, even I'm in the car.

✓ Whenever I see a beautiful sunset or beautiful clouds, I always take photographs, even when I'm in the car.

Use present simple 'see' and 'take photographs' to express habitual action ('whenever' + present). 'Cloud' should be plural 'clouds' when speaking generally. Replace 'get photographs' with the correct collocation 'take photographs' and use 'even when I'm in the car' for clarity.

× Uh, especially if I go, uh, on vacation to Norelia or down South, uh, we have this beautiful scenery of green.

✓ Uh, especially if I go on vacation to Norelia or down south, we have this beautiful green scenery.

'On vacation' is the correct phrase; 'down south' is not capitalized. 'Scenery of green' is awkward — use 'green scenery' or 'beautiful green scenery'. Also remove extra commas for smoother speech.

× I prefer sea, uh, because I live in Hill Country surrounding by mountains and, uh, greenery.

✓ I prefer the sea because I live in the Hill Country surrounded by mountains and greenery.

Use the definite article 'the sea' when speaking generally about the sea. 'Hill Country' as a place can take 'the'. Use past participle 'surrounded' (correct passive adjective) rather than 'surrounding'. Remove unnecessary commas.

× So, uh, whenever I get the chance to go for a vacation, I always choose seaside because I miss beach.

✓ So whenever I get the chance to go on vacation, I always choose the seaside because I miss the beach.

Use 'go on vacation' not 'go for a vacation'. 'Seaside' as a noun needs the definite article 'the seaside' in this context. 'Miss beach' needs the article 'the beach'.

× Uh, I love to go there, uh, get suntan, uh, play at the sea and watch the sunset.

✓ Uh, I love to go there, get a suntan, play in the sea, and watch the sunset.

Use 'get a suntan' with the article 'a'. 'Play in the sea' is the natural prepositional phrase, not 'play at the sea'. Maintain parallel structure by using base forms 'get', 'play', 'watch' consistently.