Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce small grammar errors and redundancy; make a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and articles (e.g., “I was going” → “I went” or “I was going on a road trip to Jakarta” consistently; “this amazing tall buildings” → “these tall buildings” or “amazing tall buildings”). Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and avoid repeating the same idea.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by car, especially on long road trips. For example, when I drove from Bandung to Jakarta last year, I enjoyed watching the changing urban landscape and the tall office buildings along the highway. Those views help me relax and pass the time during the journey.

Sugestão: Fix grammar (present tense vs past), pronoun errors, and improve coherence with linking words. Begin with a clear topic sentence (I don't often take photos), then give a brief reason and a specific example. Use correct pronouns (she, not he) and consistent tenses.

Exemplo: I don't often take photos of scenery from the car, because I prefer to enjoy the view directly. However, my sister always stops whenever she sees a beautiful landscape; she says taking pictures is the best way to preserve the memory, so we sometimes pull over to take a few family photos.

Sugestão: Good clear preference and reason. Improve naturalness by tightening language and correcting small phrasing issues (e.g., “background sound” → “background sound/ambient noise” or “background music”). Use one linking word and one concrete detail to enrich answer without redundancy.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because it gives me a sense of calm; for instance, I find the sound of waves crashing on the rocks very soothing. I even use seaside sounds as background noise when I study, so if I have to choose, I would always visit the coast rather than the mountains.

× Yes, I look at the window, especially when I'm on a road trip by a car.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window, especially when I'm on a road trip by car.

Use of preposition and phrasing: say 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' and 'by car' not 'by a car'. This fixes incorrect preposition/phrasing and matches present habitual action.

× One day I was going on a road trip to Jakarta.

✓ One day I went on a road trip to Jakarta.

Incorrect progressive past form: 'was going on' suggests an ongoing action, but the speaker recounts a past completed event. Use simple past 'went' for a completed action in the past.

× I can see the scenery of the urban landscape and it's just really nice and relaxing to see this amazing tall buildings.

✓ I could see the urban landscape, and it was really nice and relaxing to see these amazing tall buildings.

Number and article agreement: 'this amazing tall buildings' mixes singular demonstrative 'this' with plural 'buildings'. Use 'these' for plural. Also tense consistency: use past tense 'could'/'was' to match the past event.

× I don't frequently took photos of the scenery, but my sister does every time she sees a beautiful landscape.

✓ I don't frequently take photos of the scenery, but my sister does every time she sees a beautiful landscape.

Auxiliary and verb form: with 'do' the main verb should be base form 'take', not past 'took'. This is present habitual action, so use present simple 'don't take'.

× He says stop here and we all as a family took the picture and we continue our road trip.

✓ She says 'stop here' and we, as a family, took the picture and continued our road trip.

Pronoun agreement and tense consistency: 'He' incorrectly refers to sister; use 'She'. Quoted speech should be marked; maintain past tense for actions 'took' and 'continued' to match narrative. Also add commas for clarity.

× She says it's one way of preserving the memory of that scenery.

✓ She said it was one way of preserving the memory of the scenery.

Tense sequence: in a past narrative, speech references should shift to past: 'says' -> 'said', 'it's' -> 'it was'. Also 'that scenery' can be 'the scenery' for clarity.

× I prefer the sea because the sea always gives me a sense of calm, like the waves crashing into the rocks.

✓ I prefer the sea because it always gives me a sense of calm, like the waves crashing against the rocks.

Repetition and preposition: avoid repeating 'the sea'; use pronoun 'it'. Use 'crashing against the rocks' is the common collocation rather than 'into'.

× That sound is what I usually put on my background sound also.

✓ I usually use that sound as my background noise.

Awkward phrasing and word choice: 'put on my background sound' is unidiomatic. 'Use that sound as my background noise' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× So if I have to choose whether to visit a mountain or visit the sea, of course I will visit the sea.

✓ So if I have to choose between visiting a mountain and visiting the sea, of course I would choose the sea.

Choice construction and conditional mood: use 'choose between X and Y' or 'whether to X or Y'. For a hypothetical preference, 'would choose' is more natural than 'will visit'. Also parallel gerund forms 'visiting' improve structure.