Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và tính mạch lạc: tránh câu bị ngắt quãng và lỗi thì (ví dụ “if it's not” không rõ nghĩa). Dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích ngắn gọn với liên từ hợp lý (because/when/so). Tránh dùng câu hỏi lẫn vào câu trả lời trừ khi cần. Chú ý chia động từ và các cụm từ cố định (e.g. “give my eyes a break” → “give my eyes a break from staring at my phone”).

Exemplo: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car, especially if the route is new to me. I enjoy observing the landscape because it helps me relax and gives my eyes a break from staring at my phone.

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, số nhiều/ít và từ vựng chính xác: sửa lỗi như “sometime” → “sometimes”, “a social media” → “on social media”, “people very like them” → “people really like them”. Thêm liên từ để làm câu mạch lạc và giới thiệu một ví dụ cụ thể để chi tiết hóa câu trả lời.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because sometimes the view is stunning. For example, last month I took pictures of a dramatic coastline and posted them on social media, and many people commented that they loved the photos.

Sugestão: Cải thiện trôi chảy, diễn đạt rõ ràng và ngữ pháp: tránh sử dụng quá nhiều tiếng “ừ” (uh) và hoàn thành câu đầy đủ. Sử dụng cấu trúc so sánh chính xác (“prefer the sea to the mountains”) và giải thích cụ thể hơn với lí do rõ ràng, kèm linking words như “because” hoặc “as”.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I love lying on the beach and listening to the waves. It helps me relax and forget about everyday stress, so I feel refreshed after a seaside holiday.

× Especially if it's not.

✓ Especially if it's new to me.

The original fragment 'Especially if it's not.' is incomplete and unclear. Use a complete clause. 'New to me' correctly expresses unfamiliarity; no -ing form needed here.

× Is the night train from staring at my phone and give me my eyes a break?

✓ I try to stop staring at my phone on the night train to give my eyes a break.

Original is ungrammatical: word order and auxiliary usage are wrong. Use 'I try to stop' + gerund phrase 'staring at my phone' and infinitive purpose 'to give my eyes a break'. This forms a clear, complete sentence.

× Yes, I love capturing the landscape outside the window and sometime it's too amazing to take photos and I post it on a social media and people very like them.

✓ Yes, I love capturing the landscape outside the window; sometimes it's so amazing that I take photos and post them on social media, and people really like them.

Multiple issues: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb), use of 'it's too amazing to take photos' is incorrect — 'so amazing that I take photos' is correct. 'a social media' should be 'social media' and pronoun agreement: 'photos' -> 'them'. Use 'really like' (adverb) instead of 'very like'. Also use gerund 'capturing' correctly.

× I prefer the sea rather than the mountain because I very, uh, love lying on the beach and the way make me uh, so unwind and uh, it helps me escape from reality and.

✓ I prefer the sea rather than the mountains because I really love lying on the beach; it makes me feel relaxed and helps me escape from reality.

'The mountain' should be plural 'the mountains' when contrasting with 'the sea' generally. 'Very' is awkward with hesitation — 'really' is better. 'The way make me so unwind' is ungrammatical: use 'it makes me feel relaxed' or 'it helps me unwind'. Remove trailing 'and'.