Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), correct minor grammar (e.g. 'one of the part' → 'part of'), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep to 1–3 sentences. For example, say why you enjoy it and give a short specific example.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window to enjoy the scenery when I travel. For example, I like watching changing landscapes on a long bus ride because it helps me relax and notice small details, such as farms and rivers.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and clarity: give a direct topic sentence ('Yes, I do'), then add one clear reason and a brief specific example. Fix subject-verb agreement and word choice ('my hobby is photography', 'I am willing' → 'I like to' or 'I often'). Avoid awkward phrases like 'my hobbies is concluded that'.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Photography is my hobby, so I often take pictures from the car window to capture interesting scenes; for instance, I once photographed a field of sunflowers during a countryside drive.

Sugestão: Be direct and correct vocabulary and pronunciation: say 'I prefer the sea to the mountains.' Remove fillers and correct spelling/word form ('calm' rather than 'calm down to', 'tranquil' or 'tranquilizing' is wrong; use 'tranquil' or 'peaceful'). Provide one concrete reason or short example. Keep answer within 1–2 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea to the mountains because the wide horizon feels peaceful and helps me relax; for example, listening to waves during a beach walk always calms me down.

× Yes, actually, I often, uh, look out the window to appreciate the scenery when I go to the destination for my traveling.

✓ Yes, actually, I often look out the window to appreciate the scenery when I travel to my destination.

The original sentence uses an unnatural phrase 'go to the destination for my traveling' and mixes noun forms. Use simple present 'travel' for habitual action and the natural phrase 'travel to my destination'. Remove filler commas and 'uh' for clarity.

× I think it is a wonderful experience, one of the part of my traveling.

✓ I think it is a wonderful experience and part of my travels.

The phrase 'one of the part of my traveling' is ungrammatical. Use 'part of my travels' or 'one part of my travels' and connect ideas properly. 'Travels' as a plural noun is more natural here.

× Yes I do, As for myself, my hobbies is concluded that how to use the camera to take some beautiful photos, so I really willing to take photos when I traveling and look out the scenery of the window.

✓ Yes I do. As for me, my hobby is learning how to use a camera to take beautiful photos, so I am really willing to take photos when I travel and look at the scenery outside the window.

Multiple issues: 'hobbies is' mismatches plurality (subject-verb agreement) so use 'hobby is' or 'my hobbies are'. 'As for myself' is wordy; 'As for me' is natural. 'is concluded that how to use the camera' is incorrect structure; use 'is learning how to use a camera'. 'I really willing' needs auxiliary verb: 'I am really willing'. 'when I traveling' requires base verb: 'when I travel'. 'look out the scenery of the window' should be 'look at the scenery outside the window' (preposition correction). Corrections follow Grammar Problem Type IDs 27 and 11 as relevant.

× As for me, actually, I prefer the seed uh, to the mountain because I, I think sea is very expansive and when you see it, you can feel really tranquilline and it can let you relax and calm down to.

✓ As for me, actually, I prefer the sea to the mountains because I think the sea is very expansive; when you see it, you feel really tranquil and it helps you relax and calm down.

Several errors: 'seed' is a typo for 'sea'. Use plural 'mountains' for comparison. 'I think sea' needs the definite article 'the sea'. 'Expansive' is acceptable but 'tranquil' is the correct adjective (not 'tranquilline'). 'Let you relax and calm down to' is ungrammatical; use 'helps you relax and calm down'. Also adjust punctuation and remove filler 'uh' and repeated 'I,'.