Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Focus on giving a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Reduce repetition and avoid irrelevant phrases. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘relax’, ‘chat’, ‘enjoy the view’). Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus. I enjoy watching the passing scenery because it helps me relax and gives me something to talk about with friends or family. For example, I often point out interesting buildings or fields to the people I’m travelling with.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly, then explain briefly why or why not with concrete details and one linking phrase (e.g., ‘because’, ‘so’, ‘for example’). Avoid fragmented sentences and unnecessary fillers. Use accurate vocabulary like ‘photograph’, ‘landscape’, ‘architecture’ and be concise (2–3 sentences).

Exemplo: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the window because I like to capture interesting landscapes and buildings. For example, when I see a beautiful old church or a dramatic hillside, I take a quick photo to remember the place later.

Sugestão: State your preference clearly in one sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘so’, ‘for example’). Provide concrete details or a relevant example to make your answer more convincing. Avoid repetition and filler words.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the fresh air and peaceful atmosphere. For example, hiking in the mountains lets me see panoramic views and relax away from noisy cities.

× Basically my opening season it is a college tabling is enjoy possible I I want I want to call to his family members his colleagues traveling with sleep and enjoy enjoy easily and bus is enjoying fence OK and one personal I I want to the easy.

✓ Basically, during the opening season, when I go to college events, I enjoy it. I want to call my family members and colleagues who are traveling with me. I like to relax, sleep, and enjoy the trip; the bus ride can be comfortable and pleasant for me.

The original sentence is fragmented, repetitive, and lacks clear sentence boundaries, causing sentence structure errors (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Many clauses run together without proper punctuation or conjunctions. To improve, break the ideas into separate sentences, remove repetitions, use correct pronouns ('my' instead of 'his'), and add punctuation to clarify meaning. Use parallel structure for lists (relax, sleep, and enjoy).

× Basically my opening season it is a college tabling is enjoy possible I I want I want to call to his family members his colleagues traveling with sleep and enjoy enjoy easily and bus is enjoying fence OK and one personal I I want to the easy.

✓ Basically, during the opening season, when I go to college events, I enjoy it. I want to call my family members and colleagues who are traveling with me.

The original uses 'his' incorrectly to refer to the speaker's family and colleagues; this is a pronoun error (Grammar Problem Type ID 12). Use the correct possessive pronoun 'my' for the speaker. Also remove extra words ('to' after 'call' is unnecessary) and ensure relative clause 'who are traveling with me' uses correct pronouns and order.

× Yeah, it is a good opportunity different first of all is a perfect National Review and architects views.

✓ Yes, it is a good opportunity. First of all, the scenery often features impressive natural views and interesting architectural sights.

This sentence is ungrammatical and unclear with mixed nouns and adjectives; this is a sentence structure error (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Reorganize into two sentences, choose appropriate nouns ('natural views' and 'architectural sights'), and add transition words ('First of all') to clarify the sequence.

× It is a witness.

✓ It is a sight to behold.

'It is a witness' is awkward and semantically incorrect for describing scenery; this is a sentence structure/word choice problem (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Use an idiomatic expression or proper noun ('sight to behold' or 'a wonderful view') to convey meaning.

× It is a good opportunity in the window.

✓ The window gives a good opportunity to see the view.

The phrase is awkward and lacks clear subject-action structure (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Make the window the means ('gives an opportunity') and specify the action ('to see the view').

× I I I have I am I have a car driving is a Phil is better and inside the view.

✓ I have a car, and when I drive, the view from inside is better.

This sentence contains redundant pronouns and unclear references (Grammar Problem Type ID 12). Remove repetition, use 'I have a car' and 'when I drive' to form a clear clause, and correct word order to say 'the view from inside is better.'

× Obviously this is my opportunity. I like, I like mountain because he's a big lot of lot of mountains And, and I, I want, I want to mountain the, you know, basically, basically I, I like it, I like it Mountain and mountain is a national view.

✓ Obviously, this is my preference. I like mountains because there are many of them. I enjoy mountain scenery; mountains offer beautiful natural views.

This original passage is highly repetitive, uses incorrect pronoun 'he' for mountains, and lacks coherent sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Correct the pronoun to 'there,' use plural 'mountains,' remove repetition, and express ideas in concise, separate sentences. Use 'mountain scenery' or 'natural views' rather than 'national view.'