Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: ปรับประโยคให้เป็นปัจจุบันและลำดับความคิดให้ชัดเจน ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อสั้น ๆ ตามด้วยรายละเอียดประกอบ หลีกเลี่ยงการใช้วลีซ้ำ เช่น “from the window” และเชื่อมประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม เช่น however, because, or when เพื่อให้การตอบมีความเป็นธรรมชาติและกระชับ

Exemplo: I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus. If I feel bored or have nothing to do, I find the passing scenery relaxing, so I watch the streets and buildings go by.

Sugestão: ทำให้เหตุผลกระชับและถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์ อธิบายวิธีการใช้ภาพอย่างชัดเจน ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น so or because เพื่อเชื่อมเหตุผลกับการกระทำ และใช้คำที่เหมาะสมเช่น “track” หรือ “route” แทน “tracks” หากหมายถึงเส้นทาง

Exemplo: Sometimes I take photos of the view because I use them to check my route on Google Maps. For example, I might snap a landmark to make sure I’m going the right way.

Sugestão: ตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคหัวข้อแล้วให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะ ใช้ไวยากรณ์ถูกต้อง เช่น subject-verb agreement และเวลาให้ถูกต้อง ใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม (bustling, crowd, seaside) และเชื่อมประโยคด้วย because หรือ which to explain why คุณควรแก้ข้อผิดพลาดเรื่องคำว่า “gathering on the sea” ให้เป็น “gathering by the sea”

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because I enjoy the lively atmosphere by the seaside. For example, I like watching people play volleyball or walk along the shore, which reminds me of happy childhood memories.

× Most of the time when I was bored or I don't know what else to do so I was sitting in a bus, I'm inclined to look at the views from the window from the bus.

✓ Most of the time, when I am bored or do not know what else to do while sitting on a bus, I tend to look at the views outside the window.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses ('was bored' with 'I don't know') and uses awkward phrasing. Use present simple to describe habitual actions: 'am bored' and 'do not know'. 'Sitting in a bus' is improved to 'sitting on a bus' (preposition) and 'I'm inclined to' is more naturally 'I tend to'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent for habits (present simple), use correct preposition 'on' with vehicles, and simplify phrasing.

× Sometimes I do take a picture so that I can get my Google to check whether I'm on the right tracks as my traveling progress.

✓ Sometimes I take a picture so that I can use Google to check whether I'm on the right track as I travel.

The sentence uses unnecessary auxiliary 'do' with 'take' and incorrect noun forms: 'my Google' and 'tracks' and 'traveling progress'. Remove the emphatic 'do' unless stressing, use 'use Google' not 'my Google', singular 'track' is idiomatic, and 'as I travel' is a clearer present progressive context. Suggestions: avoid unnecessary auxiliaries, use correct collocations ('use Google', 'on the right track') and simpler continuous description 'as I travel'.

× IP13 I like the bustling when people walking around the sea or when I see people gathering on the sea or they play a volleyball together.

✓ I like the bustle when people walk along the seaside, or when I see people gathering by the sea and playing volleyball together.

Pronoun and noun usage is incorrect: 'the bustling' is better as 'the bustle' (noun), 'people walking' needs a verb form 'walk', 'on the sea' is wrong preposition—use 'by' or 'along the seaside'. 'They play a volleyball' should be 'playing volleyball' without article. Suggestions: choose correct noun forms, use base verbs for habitual scenes, and correct prepositions ('by/along the sea'). Also remove unclear prefix 'IP13'.

× It's remind me when I was a child.

✓ It reminds me of when I was a child.

'It's remind me' is ungrammatical: use third-person singular present 'reminds' and include preposition 'of' after 'reminds'. The clause 'when I was a child' correctly uses past tense to refer to a past period. Suggestions: use correct verb form 'reminds' and include 'of' after 'remind' when indicating what is remembered.