Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Reduce filler words (uh, usually twice).

Exemplo: Yes. Whenever I’m a passenger on a bus or in a car, I like to look out of the window to enjoy the scenery. For example, I often spot interesting neighborhoods or parks and make a note of places I’d like to visit later, which helps me plan weekend trips.

Sugestão: Give a clearer, fully connected response and correct small grammar issues. Use linking words (firstly, secondly) smoothly and keep to two or three sentences. Clarify the car-sickness point with precise wording.

Exemplo: No, I don’t. Firstly, photos taken through a window often come out blurry, so they don’t look good. Secondly, I sometimes get carsick, so I prefer to keep my eyes on the outside view rather than looking at a camera or phone screen.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and add one concise reason with a smooth linking phrase. Avoid repetition (the the) and use a stronger word than 'homesick' (e.g. nostalgic) if you mean pleasant memories.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains. I find them beautiful and calming, and the mountain scenery here in Canada reminds me of the ranges in Ukraine, which makes me feel nostalgic and very happy to see such breathtaking views.

× Every time I have a chance to, not to drive and to be on the bus or in the car, usually, uh, I usually look out of the window to watch the scenery.

✓ Every time I have a chance not to drive and to be on the bus or in the car, I usually look out of the window to watch the scenery.

Remove the extra comma after 'chance' and redundant filler 'usually, uh,' to make the sentence fluent. The main issue relates to awkward phrasing around infinitives; keep the infinitive structure 'to be' and place adverb 'usually' in a single appropriate position. Also 'look out of the window to watch' is acceptable with this correction.

× First of all. It's very interesting to observe, uh, new places.

✓ First of all, it's very interesting to observe new places.

The original uses a fragment 'First of all.' and has filler 'uh' and an extra comma. Combine into one sentence and remove fillers to correct sentence structure. This yields a complete main clause with clear connection to prior sentence.

× And for me, that's also a chance to find a new place where I want to visit later.

✓ For me, that's also a chance to find a new place I want to visit later.

Beginning a sentence with 'And' is informal and the relative clause 'where I want to visit later' is wordy; use 'a place I want to visit later' for concise, natural structure.

× No, I never take photos outside the window.

✓ No, I never take photos from the window.

The preposition 'outside the window' is awkward here; use 'from the window' to indicate the photos are taken through/at the window. This is a usage/article/preposition choice to make the meaning clear.

× First of all, I think it's very blurry on the photo when I take it from the window and secondly, sometimes I get car sick so I don't feel well looking at the monitor at the screen rather than the window.

✓ First of all, I think photos taken from the window turn out very blurry, and secondly, sometimes I get carsick so I don't feel comfortable looking at a screen instead of the window.

Multiple issues: 'blurry on the photo' is unnatural; use 'photos turn out very blurry' or 'photos taken from the window are very blurry.' 'Car sick' should be one word 'carsick.' 'Don't feel well looking at the monitor at the screen' is awkward—use 'don't feel comfortable looking at a screen instead of the window.' This corrects adjective/adverb usage and overall phrasing.

× I love the mountains because it's very beautiful here in Canada.

✓ I love the mountains because they're very beautiful here in Canada.

Subject-verb agreement with plural 'mountains' requires plural pronoun 'they're' rather than singular 'it's.' This corrects present-tense agreement between subject and verb/pronoun.

× The mountains are very similar to the ones that we have in Ukraine, so it's a little bit homesick for me and the the view is breathtaking.

✓ The mountains are very similar to the ones we have in Ukraine, so I feel a little homesick and the view is breathtaking.

Problems corrected: remove extra 'the' (typo). 'It's a little bit homesick for me' is ungrammatical—use 'I feel a little homesick.' Also streamline 'the ones that we have' to 'the ones we have.' These changes fix pronoun/verb usage and sentence clarity.