Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector. Reduce hesitations and repeated phrases to sound more natural.

Exemplo: Yes. I often look out the window when I travel because it makes the journey feel relaxing and special. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes like fields and small towns, which helps me unwind and notice things I miss in daily life.

Sugestão: Remove filler words and structure the answer: give a direct yes/no, then use linking words (for example, if, because) and one or two specific examples. Avoid repeating words and hesitations to improve fluency and coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the window. For example, I photograph dramatic landscapes like mountain ridges or interesting sculptures in small towns because they make good memories and look great in my travel album.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give clear reasons using cohesive devices. State your preference in one sentence, then give one or two concise reasons with specific details. Eliminate fillers and correct grammar (e.g., 'I'm not a winter person' not 'the winter person').

Exemplo: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I enjoy warm weather and beach activities. For instance, I like swimming and sunbathing in summer, and I find coastal towns have friendlier, more relaxed atmospheres.

× Yes, I love to look out the window when I'm traveling because then I get a feeling that I'm on a holiday not always happening.

✓ Yes, I love to look out the window when I'm traveling because it makes me feel like I'm on a holiday, which does not happen often.

The original mixes tenses and has awkward phrasing. Use 'it makes me feel like' to express cause and effect in present tense. Replace 'not always happening' with 'which does not happen often' for grammatical clarity and correct use of relative clause.

× I I love to watch when I'm watch out the window when I'm travelling.

✓ I love to watch the scenery when I'm looking out the window while I'm traveling.

The original repeats words and uses incorrect verb forms. 'Watch' should have an object ('the scenery') and 'watch out the window' is nonstandard; use 'looking out the window'. Combine clauses with 'while' to show simultaneous actions.

× Yes, uh, sometimes if it's, uh, if it's something interesting, yeah, happening outside of window outside the car, OK, pictures.

✓ Yes, sometimes if something interesting is happening outside the car window, I take pictures.

The sentence is disfluent and word order is incorrect. Place subject 'something interesting' before 'is happening' and use 'outside the car window' as correct prepositional phrase. Use a simple main clause 'I take pictures' to complete the thought.

× Or if it is, if it's for example, a beautiful landscape, umm, some beautiful, beautiful sculptures, exceptional people or something.

✓ Or if it is, for example, a beautiful landscape, some lovely sculptures, exceptional people, or something like that.

Use 'for example' without extra 'if it's' repetition. 'Beautiful' repeated is redundant; 'lovely' is a better variation. Add 'like that' to close the list naturally.

× I, I take photos.

✓ I take photos.

Remove repeated filler 'I,'. The simple present 'I take photos' correctly expresses habitual action.

× 100% see, I'm not the winter person and I associate mountains with winters I I'm a summer girl.

✓ Definitely the sea; I'm not a winter person and I associate mountains with winter. I'm a summer person.

'100% see' is informal and unclear; 'Definitely the sea' is appropriate. Use singular 'winter' after 'with' and avoid repetition. 'Summer person' is more natural than 'summer girl' in neutral speech.

× I love the beach, I love the sea I love uh, and I love in I love uh smiling people like we're close and just.

✓ I love the beach and the sea, and I also enjoy being around smiling people who seem friendly and close-knit.

Original contains repetitions and fragments. Combine ideas with conjunctions, remove fillers, and clarify 'smiling people like we're close' to 'people who seem friendly and close-knit' to express the intended meaning.