Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix tense and article errors (e.g., "when I travel by bus there isn't much to do").

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus because there isn’t much else to do. For example, I enjoy watching the lush green trees and small farms along the road, which make me feel relaxed and uplifted.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and finish sentences clearly. Provide a concise topic sentence and one or two specific reasons or examples. Use correct verb forms and avoid filler words like "uh."

Exemplo: Sometimes I take photos of scenery if I see something particularly beautiful. I usually save them as wallpapers or print a few to hang on my wall as reminders of places I liked.

Sugestão: Give a clear preference or explain why you like both with structured sentences and specific details. Correct grammar (e.g., "when I visit the mountains") and avoid vague phrases like "good good." Use linking words such as "however" or "on the other hand."

Exemplo: I like both, but if I had to choose I would pick the mountains for their dramatic views. For instance, when I visit mountains I can hike to high peaks and see long-distance panoramas, while the sea is more relaxing for strolling along the shore.

× Yes I do the same thing because when I travel through bus there are not such much things which I can do so I was feeling bored that that's when I saw outside the bus and enjoy the view from the outside.

✓ Yes, I do the same thing because when I travel by bus there are not many things I can do, so I feel bored; that's when I look out of the bus and enjoy the view.

Incorrect prepositions: use 'by bus' not 'through bus', and 'look out of' or 'look out the window' rather than 'saw outside the bus'. Also replace awkward phrases: 'not such much things' -> 'not many things', and adjust tense consistency from past to present 'I feel bored' to match general habit. Improve sentence flow by using punctuation and conjunctions correctly.

× There are lush green trees which give me a comfortable and great positive vibe.

✓ There are lush green trees that give me a comfortable, positive feeling.

'Great positive vibe' is awkward; use 'a comfortable, positive feeling'. Use 'that' for defining clause. Article use: 'a comfortable' required. 'Vibe' is informal; 'feeling' is clearer.

× Sometimes I love to take pictures, uh, if I find something, uh, very scenic and, uh, beautiful.

✓ Sometimes I love to take pictures if I find something very scenic and beautiful.

Remove filler 'uh' and commas; the present simple is appropriate for habitual action. No tense change needed but punctuation and redundancy removed for clarity.

× So I take picture as a memory and use it, uh, in the future as a wallpaper or print out that and, uh, make a picture in my home.

✓ So I take pictures as memories and use them later as wallpapers, or print them out to put on my wall at home.

Plural agreement: 'pictures' and 'them' should be plural to match; 'take picture' incorrect. 'Print out that' -> 'print them out'. 'Make a picture in my home' unclear; 'put on my wall at home' is clearer.

× So it is the thing which I always.

✓ So it is something I always do.

Sentence incomplete and poor structure. 'The thing which I always' lacks verb; add 'do' and use 'something' for natural phrasing.

× Well, I prefer both because both have their different vibes and different importance in our life.

✓ Well, I prefer both because each has a different vibe and importance in life.

Use present simple 'prefer' is correct; adjust 'their different vibes' to 'each has a different vibe' and 'in our life' to 'in life' for natural generalization.

× While when I visiting mountains there are high peaks and from that I can see a lot a lot far and the pictures are very scenic.

✓ When I visit mountains, there are high peaks, and from them I can see very far; the views are very scenic.

Verb form: 'visiting' should be 'visit' (present simple) for habitual action. Replace 'from that I can see a lot a lot far' with 'from them I can see very far'. Use 'views' instead of 'pictures' if referring to scenery; fix repetition and structure.

× Another side is the river and they also provide a good good.

✓ On the other hand, there are rivers, which also provide a pleasant experience.

Preposition and phrasing: 'Another side is the river' is unnatural; use 'On the other hand' or 'There are also rivers'. 'They' must agree with 'rivers'. 'Good good' is a filler; replace with 'pleasant experience' for clarity.