Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "and") correctly and avoid repetition. Also correct small grammar and collocation errors (e.g., "a whole new feeling" not "whole new good feeling you can feel").

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing landscape. For example, I like to see green fields and small villages pass by, which I find relaxing. Sometimes I listen to music at the same time, and the combination makes the journey more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Give a clear, consistent answer first (yes or no), then explain with one specific example. Avoid contradictory phrases and unclear statements. Use linking words like "but" or "however" correctly. Keep it to two or three sentences max.

Exemplo: Sometimes I take photos through the car window if I see a peaceful or unusual scene, such as a colorful sunset or a foggy valley. However, I don't do it often because reflections on the glass and motion blur usually ruin the pictures.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid filler words and slang like "stupid" and correct grammar (e.g., "I come from a country" and "I would rather live in the mountains"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because I grew up near them and enjoy hiking and the fresh air. Since my country has no coastline, I like to stay in the mountains and occasionally travel to the sea for a short holiday.

× I do look at the scenery when traveling by bus or car 'cause it's nice to see them and while listening to music it can be like whole new good feeling you can feel.

✓ I do look at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because it's nice to see it, and while listening to music it can feel like a whole new, pleasant experience.

Problems: incorrect pronoun number ('them' should be 'it' because scenery is uncountable/singular), awkward word order and choice ('like whole new good feeling you can feel' is redundant and unidiomatic), and use of colloquial contraction 'cause. Suggestion: use present simple consistently ('do look' is acceptable for emphasis), replace 'them' with 'it', reorder phrase to 'it can feel like a whole new, pleasant experience' and avoid redundant words.

× Sometimes I take the scenery out of the window if I think it's a peaceful scene worth taking, but I must have done. I don't take it.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of the scenery out of the window if I think it's a peaceful scene worth photographing, but not always. Often I don't.

Problems: incorrect verb collocation ('take the scenery' should be 'take photos of the scenery' or 'photograph the scenery'), confusing tense/modal phrase 'I must have done' is wrong here, and pronoun/reference issues in 'I don't take it' (unclear what 'it' refers to). Suggestion: use correct collocation 'take photos of' or 'photograph', replace 'I must have done' with 'not always' or 'sometimes I don't', and make pronoun references clear.

× I prefer mountains. Sea Doo looks really nice. Stupid. I'm come from the country where we don't have any sea and we kind of have nice mountains and I rather live in in mountain and travel to sea.

✓ I prefer the mountains. The sea looks really nice, but I'm from a country where we don't have a sea; we have nice mountains and I would rather live in the mountains and travel to the sea.

Problems: missing definite articles ('the mountains', 'the sea'), incorrect or unclear word 'Sea Doo' (likely intended 'the sea'), incorrect verb form 'I'm come from' should be 'I'm from' or 'I come from', repetition 'in in', wrong preposition and article with 'mountain' (should be 'in the mountains'), and modal/phrase choice 'I rather' should be 'I would rather'. Suggestion: use definite articles with specific geographic nouns, correct verb forms ('I'm from' or 'I come from'), use plural for general mountains, and 'would rather' for preferences.