Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and repetition, give one clear example and add a linking phrase. Keep it within 2–3 concise sentences. Also correct minor word choice (use 'scenery' or 'the scenery' rather than 'sceneries').

Exemplo: Yes, I usually sit by the window because I enjoy watching the scenery. For example, I like watching sunsets over the hills because the changing colors are relaxing and make the journey more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Good content and clear reason. To improve, vary vocabulary (use 'landscape' and 'scenery' appropriately), remove minor repetition, and connect ideas with a linking word for fluency. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos from the window because the landscape changes so much during a trip. For example, when the sky turns orange at sunset I take pictures to capture the colors because they make me feel relaxed and mark a memorable moment.

Sugestão: Answer directly, reduce hesitations and repetition, and add a brief linking phrase to list reasons smoothly. Use precise adjectives and avoid repeating short phrases. Keep answer within three sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because we have many beautiful beaches nearby. I enjoy the white sand, clear water and the smell of salty air, which helps me relax and unwind.

× I usually try to sit near the window because I love watching umm, sceneries and uh, landscapes.

✓ I usually try to sit near the window because I love watching scenery and landscapes.

The noun 'scenery' is an uncountable noun in English and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Use the singular uncountable form 'scenery'. 'Landscapes' is fine in plural. Suggestion: use uncountable nouns in singular form (scenery, furniture, information).

× Yes, I usually sit by the window because I love seeing sceneries and landscape.

✓ Yes, I usually sit by the window because I love seeing scenery and landscapes.

Again, 'scenery' is uncountable and must not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Also 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' if referring to various views. Use 'scenery' (singular uncountable) and 'landscapes' (plural countable) to match meaning.

× So for example, like umm, watching uh, sunsets and sunsets.

✓ For example, I enjoy watching sunsets.

The original repeats 'sunsets and sunsets' and uses filler words that break sentence structure. This is a redundancy and results in an incoherent list. Simplify and remove fillers: 'For example, I enjoy watching sunsets.' Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

× I like both but I prefer umm the sea.

✓ I like both, but I prefer the sea.

Filler 'umm' interrupts sentence flow and is not needed in writing. Add a comma before 'but' for clarity. The sentence structure is correct otherwise.

× In our in our place there are a lot of beautiful beaches.

✓ In our area there are a lot of beautiful beaches.

The repeated phrase 'in our in our place' is redundant and awkward. 'Place' is acceptable but 'area' sounds more natural. Use 'in our area' or 'where I live' to express location. Remove repetition.

× I just love uh, the white sand, the clear umm water and also I like smelling the salty air.

✓ I just love the white sand, the clear water, and I also like smelling the salty air.

The sentence mainly needs smoothing: remove filler 'uh' and 'umm', add commas and 'and' for parallel structure. The use of 'the' before 'white sand' and 'clear water' is acceptable when referring to specific features of the beaches. Improve parallelism by using consistent structure: 'the white sand, the clear water, and I also like...'.