Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản, dùng câu ngắn gọn và trực tiếp hơn, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ hợp lý để câu mạch lạc. Ví dụ: sửa các lỗi thì (had → have), danh từ số ít/nhì (activities → activity), loại bỏ cụm không rõ nghĩa (add more and more breathtaking views). Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rồi nối các chi tiết hỗ trợ bằng liên từ như “and” hoặc “which” để tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel, especially if the vehicle has large windows. It makes me feel closer to my destination, and I love watching the changing landscapes and scenery along the way.

Sugestão: Cần diễn đạt rõ ý hơn, dùng từ vựng phù hợp và câu nối hợp lý. Tránh các mệnh đề rời rạc như “Whatever.” và dùng cụm từ đúng (remind → remind me of; revised the album → update/revisit my photo album). Nên nêu lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn để câu thuyết phục.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because they help me remember interesting places and moments. After trips I usually organize and review the photos in an album on my phone.

Sugestão: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, giải thích lý do rõ ràng bằng ngôn ngữ chính xác và tránh câu không rõ nghĩa (“modern heart like atmosphere”). Dùng thì đúng (had → has) và cụm từ phù hợp (hidden threats, affect my health). Nếu không thích cả hai, nên đưa ví dụ cụ thể và so sánh ngắn gọn.

Exemplo: I don't really prefer either. I avoid the sea because I worry about hidden dangers like strong currents, and I don't enjoy the mountains either because I find hiking tiring and prefer more relaxed activities.

× Actually, I'm very keen on that activities, especially in the vehicles which had a large window.

✓ Actually, I'm very keen on those activities, especially in vehicles that have large windows.

Incorrect pronoun/determiner and noun number: 'that activities' should be 'those activities' to match plural noun; use 'vehicles that have' instead of 'the vehicles which had' to indicate general present preference and to use correct relative clause; 'a large window' should be plural 'large windows' to match 'vehicles' or can be 'a large window' if singular vehicle is intended. Suggestion: use 'those' with plural nouns and keep present tense for habitual actions.

× It made me feel I can get closer to the destination which I want and I can add more and more breathtaking views and scenery.

✓ It makes me feel I can get closer to the destination I want, and I can see more and more breathtaking views and scenery.

Tense and relative pronoun: change past 'made' to present 'makes' to describe a habitual feeling; 'which I want' is awkward—use 'I want' without 'which' for clarity; 'add more and more breathtaking views' is incorrect verb choice—use 'see' to describe experiencing views. Suggestion: keep present tense for habitual actions and use appropriate verbs for perception.

× Absolutely, I'm very interested in that.

✓ Absolutely, I'm very interested in that.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. Note: 'that' refers to 'taking photos' in context, which is fine.

× Indeed, it helps me remind the dull memory.

✓ Indeed, it helps me remember dull memories.

Wrong verb form and article/noun number: 'helps me remind' is incorrect—use 'helps me remember' (object is the person remembering, not being reminded by itself); 'the dull memory' should be plural or more natural as 'dull memories' without definite article. Suggestion: use verb 'remember' with direct object and pluralize general nouns.

× Whatever.

✓ Anyway.

'Whatever' used alone is informal and often means indifference; in this context 'Anyway' or 'Also' fits better to continue the thought. Suggestion: use linking adverbs to transition.

× I revised the album moreover.

✓ I update the album as well.

Tense and adverb placement: 'revised' (past) conflicts with present context—use present 'update' for habitual action; 'moreover' is formal and awkward at sentence end—use 'as well' or 'also'. Suggestion: use correct tense for habitual actions and common adverbs for addition.

× Actually I dislike both of them.

✓ Actually, I dislike both of them.

Sentence is correct except missing comma after introductory 'Actually'; no pronoun change needed. Suggestion: include comma for better punctuation.

× As a result the sea had a wide range of hidden threat which can damage my health.

✓ As a result, the sea has a wide range of hidden threats that can damage my health.

Tense and number: use present 'has' for a general statement rather than past 'had'; 'a wide range of hidden threat' should be 'a wide range of hidden threats' (plural); relative clause 'which can' is acceptable but 'that can' is more natural here. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for general facts and match noun number.

× Moreover the modern heart like atmosphere.

✓ Moreover, the atmosphere is modern and heart-like.

Word choice and structure: 'heart like' should be hyphenated 'heart-like' as a compound adjective, but 'heart-like atmosphere' is awkward; better to rephrase 'the atmosphere feels modern and heartless' or 'the atmosphere feels artificial' depending on intended meaning. Also add comma after 'Moreover'. Suggestion: choose precise adjectives and use hyphenation for compound adjectives, and punctuate introductory adverbs.