Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. "scenery" and "view" used many times) and religious phrases unless relevant. Also correct small grammar issues ("look at outside the view" → "look at the scenery outside").

Exemplo: Yes, I often look at the scenery outside when I travel by bus or car. For example, I enjoy watching mountains and rivers pass by because the changing landscapes relax me and make the journey more interesting.

Sugestão: Keep the response direct and use correct verb forms and linking words. Begin with a topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Fix grammar ("photos serves" → "photos serve", tense consistency).

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because they serve as souvenirs. For instance, when I visited the countryside last year I photographed old houses and fields to remember that trip.

Sugestão: Answer directly and naturally. Remove informal or unclear phrases like "going to cheat" and "I prepared seas." Use linking words to explain reasons and include one specific example. Also avoid repeating similar ideas and correct collocations ("watch sunsets and sunrises", "beaches calm me").

Exemplo: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I love watching sunrises and sunsets over the water. For example, sitting on a beach at dawn helps me relax and clears my mind after a busy week.

× Yes, it is very enjoyable to look at outside the view, the scenery, because it makes my heart really happy because I have to see the different scenery such as mountains, rivers and even different landscapes and the different God's creations such as the bird.

✓ Yes, it is very enjoyable to look at the scenery outside because it makes me very happy; I get to see different views such as mountains, rivers, various landscapes, and God’s creations like birds.

This sentence has awkward adjective/adverb placement and redundant phrasing. 'look at outside the view' is incorrect word order; 'look at the scenery outside' or 'the scenery outside' is correct. 'it makes my heart really happy' is more natural as 'it makes me very happy.' 'I have to see' implies obligation; use 'I get to see' to express opportunity. Also remove repeated words ('the different scenery' and 'different') and use plural 'birds' when referring generally. Improve fluency by combining clauses and removing redundancy.

× When I travel, I love taking photos because these photos serves as nice souvenirs whenever I traveled outside my country or even my hometown.

✓ When I travel, I love taking photos because these photos serve as nice souvenirs whenever I travel outside my country or even my hometown.

Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency errors: 'photos serves' is incorrect; the plural subject 'photos' takes the base verb 'serve.' The sentence mixes present habitual ('When I travel, I love taking photos') with past tense 'whenever I traveled'; keep the present simple 'whenever I travel' to indicate habitual action. Use present tense for repeated activities.

× If I'm going to cheat to choose between the two, I would choose and I prepared seas because I do love sunsets and sunrises.

✓ If I had to choose between the two, I would choose the sea because I love sunsets and sunrises.

The original uses awkward and incorrect expressions: 'going to cheat to choose' is unidiomatic—use 'had to choose' or 'were forced to choose.' 'I would choose and I prepared seas' is incorrect grammar and word choice; 'prepared' is wrong here. Also use singular 'sea' when choosing the general environment. Simplify to a conditional structure 'If I had to choose... I would choose...' and remove unnecessary words.

× Whenever I look at the beaches it makes my body and mind calm.

✓ Whenever I look at the beach, it calms my body and mind.

Word choice and agreement: use singular 'the beach' to refer to the concept in general, or 'beaches' with plural verb form if talking about multiple beaches. 'It makes my body and mind calm' is awkward; use 'it calms my body and mind' or 'it makes me feel calm.' Put a comma after the introductory clause for clarity.