Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar and fluency, reduce filler words, and clarify structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, follow with one or two supporting details using linking words, and avoid unnecessary hesitations. Also fix verb forms and articles (e.g., "when I travel", "reading a book", "I'm so exhausted").

Exemplo: I don't usually look out of the window when I travel. Instead, I prefer to scroll through my phone or read a book to use my spare time productively. Moreover, if I'm very tired, I often take a short nap during the journey.

Sugestão: Make sentences more natural and grammatically correct, combine short fragments, and provide a clear supporting example. Replace awkward phrases ("adore to take capturing photo") with natural alternatives and use linking words to join ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, absolutely. I love taking photos of the scenery, especially in autumn when the trees are full of color. For example, I often stop to photograph bright red and orange foliage because those pictures help me remember the trip.

Sugestão: Avoid filler sounds and complete your sentences. Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct awkward phrases (e.g., "with pleasures to spend my time by") and finish the contrast clearly.

Exemplo: It depends on my mood and the season. If I want adventure, I go to the mountains for hiking and fresh air; however, if I want to relax, I prefer the sea because I can sunbathe and listen to the waves.

× When I traveling, I prefer scrolling my phone or reading the book.

✓ When I travel, I prefer scrolling through my phone or reading a book.

'traveling' is incorrect after subject 'I' because the simple present 'travel' is required for habitual actions (subject-verb agreement and present tense). Use 'scrolling through my phone' and 'a book' for natural collocation and correct article use. Use simple present for routines: 'When I travel, I prefer...'.

× Uh, to spend spare time productively.

✓ I do that to spend my spare time productively.

This fragment lacks a clear subject and verb. Converting it to a full sentence with subject 'I' and verb 'do' links it to the previous statement and corrects sentence structure. Also add 'my' before 'spare time'.

× Additionally, when I so exhausted, I can take a short nap to.

✓ Additionally, when I am so exhausted, I can take a short nap too.

Missing auxiliary 'am' for the adjective 'exhausted' (pronoun requires a verb). 'to' at the end is incorrect; use 'too' to mean 'also'. Correct structure: 'when I am exhausted'. 'so' is acceptable for emphasis.

× I adore to take capturing photo, especially when the scenery is stunning.

✓ I adore taking photos, especially when the scenery is stunning.

Verb 'adore' should be followed by a gerund ('taking'), not an infinitive ('to take'). 'capturing photo' is ungrammatical; use plural 'photos' or 'a photo'. Use 'taking photos' for natural expression.

× For example during autumn when trees are colorful.

✓ For example, during autumn when the trees are colorful, I take more photos.

This fragment lacks a main verb. Add a clause that completes the sentence and include commas after 'For example' and before the subordinate clause. Also include 'the' before 'trees' for specificity.

× Additionally, it helps me keep my memories.

✓ Additionally, it helps me preserve my memories.

'keep my memories' is understandable but unidiomatic; 'preserve my memories' or 'help me remember' is more natural. Present tense 'helps' is correct; this suggestion improves word choice.

× To be honest, it depends on my mood and the season.

✓ To be honest, it depends on my mood and the season.

This sentence is grammatical. No correction needed; included to indicate it fits tense and structure.

× Uh, So when I uh, want to adventure, I head to the mountains for hiking, but when I want to relax, I uh, with pleasures to spend uh, my time by.

✓ So, when I want an adventure, I head to the mountains for hiking, but when I want to relax, I like to spend my time by the sea.

Multiple issues: 'want to adventure' should be 'want an adventure' or 'want to go on an adventure'. 'with pleasures to spend my time by' is ungrammatical and unclear; use 'I like to spend my time by the sea'. Added commas and fixed word order. 'like to spend my time' is a natural collocation.