Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りと冗長さがあり、論理のつながりが弱いです。冒頭で直接答え（例：Yes, I do.）を述べ、その後に1〜2文で理由や具体例を述べてください。接続詞（because, so, therefore, for example）を適切に使い、代名詞や名詞の単数・複数の一致（bus or car, the view）を確認してください。発音や流暢さも改善すると自然さが増します。

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy discovering new places. For example, I like watching the changing landscapes and people, which helps me feel more connected to the place I’m visiting.

Sugestão: 回答は短く明確ですが、不自然な表現（memorize the view, it feel it can be）や文法ミスがあります。簡潔に答え、理由や具体例を1〜2文で補足してください。語彙は“capture”や“keep memories”など自然な表現を使い、時制と主語の一致を確認してください。

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because I like to capture special moments. After the trip, I review the pictures to remember what I saw and to share my favourite shots with friends.

Sugestão: 回答は選択を明確にしていますが、理由の説明が混乱しており、不適切な語（She, the way）や不完全な文があります。まず簡潔な主張（I prefer the sea.）を述べ、その後で具体的な理由を2文以内で述べてください。感情表現は控えめにし、具体的な理由（e.g. sound of waves, fresh air, swimming）を挙げて論理的につなげてください。

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because I find it very relaxing. I enjoy the sound of the waves and the fresh sea breeze, and I like swimming and walking along the beach more than hiking in the mountains.

× When I travel by bus or cars, I often watch out the view because of course the traveling places are new places so I can move my emotion.

✓ When I travel by bus or car, I often watch the view because the places I visit are new, so they can move my emotions.

'bus or cars' mixes singular and plural; use parallel nouns 'bus or car' or both plural. 'watch out the view' is incorrect verb phrase; use 'watch the view' or 'look at the view'. 'the traveling places are new places' is awkward; 'the places I visit are new' is clearer. 'move my emotion' requires plural 'emotions' and 'move' fits better than 'can move' placement. Japanese explanation: 'bus or cars'は単数と複数が混在しているため不適切です。'watch out the view'は英語的表現として誤りで、'watch the view'や'look at the view'が適切です。'the traveling places are new places'は不自然なので' the places I visit are new'とすると意味が明確になります。'move my emotion'は通常複数形'emotions'を用います。

× So I like to watch outside view.

✓ So I like to watch the view outside.

'watch outside view' incorrectly orders noun and modifier; 'the view outside' or 'the outside view' is correct. Japanese explanation: 'outside view'の語順が不自然です。'the view outside'または'the outside view'のように修正してください。

× Yes, I like to take photos of the scene outside the car window because I want to memorize the view and after I finish the trip I want to review these photos and it feel it can be.

✓ Yes, I like to take photos of the scene outside the car window because I want to remember the view, and after I finish the trip I want to review these photos because they make me feel that way.

'memorize' is usually used for facts; for experiences use 'remember'. The clause 'and it feel it can be' is ungrammatical; replace with 'they make me feel that way' to refer to the photos. Japanese explanation: 'memorize'は事実を記憶する時に使うので、経験や景色には'remember'が自然です。'it feel it can be'は文法的に成り立たないので、写真が感情を呼び起こすことを表す'they make me feel that way'のように修正します。

× I prefer the sea. This is because actually I don't like to go the mountains because there are a lot of parks, I hate them, so I cannot go there.

✓ I prefer the sea. Actually, I don't like going to the mountains because there are a lot of parks; I dislike them, so I avoid going there.

'go the mountains' needs preposition 'go to the mountains'. Use gerund 'like going' rather than 'like to go' for general preference. 'I hate them, so I cannot go there' is better as 'I dislike them, so I avoid going there' for clarity. Japanese explanation: 'go the mountains'は前置詞'to'が必要です。一般的な好みを言うときは'like going'が自然です。'I hate them, so I cannot go there'は論理的につながりが不自然なので、'I dislike them, so I avoid going there'のように修正してください。

× On the other hand, the She can feel relaxed, I like the sounds of the way and also she has a.

✓ On the other hand, the sea makes me feel relaxed; I like the sounds of the waves, and it has a calming effect.

'the She' incorrectly capitalized and uses article with a pronoun; 'she' should not be used for the sea here—use 'it' or 'the sea'. 'the sounds of the way' is a word choice error; should be 'the sounds of the waves'. The fragment 'and also she has a.' is incomplete; clarify as 'it has a calming effect.' Japanese explanation: 'the She'は誤りで、海を指すときは'the sea'または'it'を使います。'the sounds of the way'は'waves'（波）の綴りと語彙の誤りです。文の最後が未完成なので'it has a calming effect'などで完結させてください。