Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating words and grammatical errors (e.g., subject-verb agreement, word order). Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'and') to connect ideas and keep the response within 3–4 short sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy observing the countryside. For example, I like watching birds, trees and the changing sky, which helps me relax during the journey.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly and give a brief, precise reason. Correct grammar (use 'admire' → 'admireD' or 'I am an admirer of photography') and avoid hesitations and repetitions. Use one linking phrase to connect reason and result (e.g., 'so' or 'which'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery because I am a keen photographer. I take those pictures to remind myself of peaceful moments at home, and I sometimes edit them into albums later.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, and follow with specific, relevant supporting details. Remove filler sounds ('uh') and unclear phrasing ('used to join it in my notebook' is confusing). Explain briefly why the sea is meaningful (memories, activities, atmosphere). Keep to 2–3 coherent sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because I grew up visiting the beach with my family, and those visits left strong, happy memories. The sound of the waves and the open horizon make me feel calm and remind me of my childhood.

× Of course you don't see the scenes at home, right? And I enjoy watching nature, nature and I love how everything go in alignment within it, like birds and animals and the sky.

✓ Of course you don't see the scenery at home, right? I enjoy watching nature, and I love how everything goes in alignment within it, like birds, animals, and the sky.

The student mixed second-person 'you' with their own statement and used plural 'scenes' incorrectly; 'scenery' is the correct uncountable noun. 'Nature and I' is awkwardly phrased; split into separate sentences. 'Everything go' is wrong subject-verb agreement; 'everything' is singular so use 'goes'. Also add commas for list clarity and remove repeated word 'nature'. Suggestions: use 'scenery' for landscape, keep consistent subject (I), and ensure verb agrees with singular subjects.

× Yes, as a person who admire photography, I take photos of everything.

✓ Yes, as a person who admires photography, I take photos of everything.

The relative clause 'who admire photography' needs third-person singular verb agreement with 'person', so 'admires' is correct. Use 'admires' not base form. Suggestion: match verb form to the noun in relative clauses (person -> admires).

× I like how everything moves in harmony in nature, as I mentioned.

✓ I like how everything moves in harmony in nature, as I mentioned.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It is included to show it's fine. Explanation: subject-verb agreement and pronoun use are correct.

× So I I'd like to remind myself of that when I when I'm at home.

✓ So I'd like to remind myself of that when I'm at home.

Redundant fragments 'I' and duplicated 'when' create a sentence structure error. Remove the extra 'I' and one 'when' to make a clear conditional time clause. Suggestion: read aloud to catch repeated words and remove duplicates.

× I prefer the sea because back when I was younger, uh, I used to go to the beach and, uh, I, uh, used to join it in my notebook.

✓ I prefer the sea because when I was younger, I used to go to the beach and used to jot it down in my notebook.

The phrase 'used to join it in my notebook' is incorrect collocation; likely intended 'jot it down' (write notes). Excess fillers 'uh' removed for clarity. 'Back when' is acceptable but wordy; 'when I was younger' suffices. Use 'used to' for habitual past actions. Suggestion: choose correct verb collocations ('jot down', 'write down') and avoid filler words.

× So I think that they know my deepest secrets.

✓ So I think that they know my deepest secrets.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but potentially ambiguous: 'they' likely refers to 'the sea' and 'the beach' (inanimate), which is a stylistic choice. No grammatical correction required. Suggestion: if clarity is needed, replace 'they' with 'the sea and the beach'.

× That's why I would prefer the sea.

✓ That's why I prefer the sea.

'Would prefer' is not wrong but 'prefer' is more natural when stating a general preference. This is a style choice rather than a strict grammar error. Suggestion: use simple present 'prefer' for general preferences.