Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and articles, avoid redundancy (e.g. “enjoy watching” not “enjoy to watching”).

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel. I enjoy spotting unusual scenes or interesting people because their activities often make me smile; moreover, when the bus passes through rural areas the landscape is restful, so I relax and rest my eyes.

Sugestão: Make the negative response direct and use correct noun/verb forms. Use one clear reason and a linking phrase for coherence. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb patterns (e.g. “memorize” not “memory”, “watching” not “to watching”).

Exemplo: No, I seldom take photos of scenery from a moving car. I prefer to watch and memorize the view because photos from a window are often blurred, and I find looking with my own eyes more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting reasons, and correct word choice and comparisons. Use linking words like “because” or “whereas” and avoid repeating words (“mountain” twice). Replace awkward phrases like “smoothen my emotions” with natural expressions.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because the sound of the waves relaxes me and lifts my mood. Whereas the mountains are pleasant, I find them a bit too quiet for my taste, so I usually choose the coast for a relaxing break.

× They may be doing some funny things and I will enjoy to watching what they're doing.

✓ They may be doing some funny things and I will enjoy watching what they're doing.

Use of 'enjoy' requires a gerund (verb+ing) directly after it, not 'to' plus infinitive. Remove 'to' before 'watching'. Suggestion: learn verbs that are followed by gerunds (enjoy, avoid, consider).

× Also, when the bus go to some national area, it is quite restful for my eyes and I can relax.

✓ Also, when the bus goes to some national area, it is quite restful for my eyes and I can relax.

Subject 'the bus' is singular so the verb must be 'goes' (third person singular). Ensure subject-verb agreement in present tense: add -s for he/she/it.

× No, I seldom take photos of the scenery outside the car window because rather than taking photo I would like to spend my time to watching it and memory it in my brain.

✓ No, I seldom take photos of the scenery outside the car window because rather than taking photos I would like to spend my time watching it and memorizing it in my brain.

Multiple issues: 'taking photo' should be plural 'taking photos'; 'spend time' is followed by a gerund, so use 'watching' not 'to watching'; 'memory' is a noun, the verb needed is 'memorize' (or 'remember'); American spelling 'memorizing' or British 'memorising'. Follow gerund after 'spend time' and use correct verb form.

× But not spending time to taking a photo because I want to using my eyes to memorize all the things.

✓ But I do not spend time taking photos because I want to use my eyes to memorize everything.

'Not spending time to taking' is incorrect: use 'do not spend time taking' with gerund after 'spend time'. 'Want to using' is wrong; after 'want to' use base verb 'use'. Replace 'all the things' with 'everything' for naturalness.

× Comparing with the mountain, the mountain is a little bit too quiet for me.

✓ Compared with the mountains, they are a little too quiet for me.

Use 'compared with' or 'compared to' and match number: compare plural 'mountains' with 'the sea' (implied). Original repeated 'the mountain' is awkward. Also use 'a little too quiet' rather than 'a little bit too quiet' for conciseness. Ensure the subject matches plurality.

× The sounds of the waves always make me relax and smoothen my emotions.

✓ The sound of the waves always makes me relax and calms my emotions.

'Sounds' can be singular 'sound' or keep plural but then verb needs agreement: 'make' vs 'makes'. Better: 'The sound of the waves always makes me relax' with singular verb 'makes'. 'Smoothen my emotions' is non-idiomatic; use 'calm my emotions' or 'calm me down'.