Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct word choice (e.g., “photos” not “portals”), and limit to 2–4 sentences. Add one specific supporting detail and a linking word to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes. I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find passing landscapes relaxing. For example, I often take photos of interesting views so I can remember the colors and light, and sometimes I share them with friends.

Sugestão: Remove fillers and be grammatically correct. Use one clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like “so” or “then” to connect ideas. Avoid overlong or awkward phrasing.

Exemplo: Yes. I often take photos from the car window to capture special moments, and then I upload the best ones to social media so my friends can see them. This helps me remember the trip and share the experience.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer and one clear reason with specific details. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases. Use linking words (e.g., “however”, “because”) and limit to 2–3 sentences to be natural and effective.

Exemplo: It depends on my mood. If I want peace and fresh air, I prefer the mountains because I can hike and enjoy quiet trails; however, if I want to relax and be active, I choose the sea for swimming and beach games.

× Yes, to be honest, it's my favorite activity to look out to the window at the scenery when I am traveling by bus or by car, and I will always try to capture the best moments and take the portals of this scenery.

✓ Yes, to be honest, it's my favorite activity to look out of the window at the scenery when I am traveling by bus or car, and I always try to capture the best moments and take photos of the scenery.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'out to' should be 'out of' for looking through a window; redundant 'by' before 'car' is unnecessary; 'will always try' is unnatural for habitual action in this context so use present simple 'always try'; 'portals of this scenery' is incorrect word choice — use 'photos of the scenery'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions, use present simple for habits, and choose appropriate nouns (photos).

× Yes Sir, I will wait the take photos of the scenery outside the car window. Uh, and umm, I always try to save the moment uh, and after that I share it to, to my friends on social media and it reminds me always a great time which I have had ever.

✓ Yes sir, I wait and take photos of the scenery outside the car window. I always try to capture the moment, and after that I share it with my friends on social media; it always reminds me of a great time I have had.

Errors: 'will wait the take' is ungrammatical — use simple present 'wait and take' for habitual actions; 'save the moment' is acceptable but 'capture the moment' is more natural; 'share it to' should be 'share it with' (preposition error); 'reminds me always a great time which I have had ever' has word order and redundancy problems: 'always reminds me of a great time I have had' is correct. Suggestions: use simple present for routines, correct verb phrases, and proper prepositions 'with' and 'reminds...of'.

× Actually, it depends, uh, on my mood because sometimes, umm, I would like to see mountain mountains we use and sometimes when, uh, I feel more energetic and, uh, I like to, uh, maybe is a lively, uh, environment. I propose the scenario is.

✓ Actually, it depends on my mood because sometimes I would like to see mountains, and sometimes when I feel more energetic I prefer the sea because it is a livelier environment.

Errors: repeated and incorrect words 'mountain mountains we use' unclear — should be 'mountains'; unnecessary filler words removed; 'I like to, maybe is a lively' is ungrammatical — use 'I prefer the sea because it is a livelier environment.' 'I propose the scenario is' is awkward and unnecessary. Suggestions: simplify sentence, use correct plural 'mountains', use 'prefer' for choices, and ensure subject-verb agreement ('it is a livelier environment').