Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 전반적으로 이해하기 쉽지만 자연스러운 표현과 문장 구조를 더 개선해야 합니다. 예를 들어 'of course'와 'because'가 중복되는 느낌을 줄 수 있고, 감정 표현을 보다 구체적으로 하고 연결어를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한 'feel fresh' 대신 더 자연스러운 표현(예: feel refreshed)을 사용하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because there are many beautiful views. For example, seeing green fields and small villages makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.

Sugestão: 의사 전달은 되지만 문법과 어휘 선택에서 오류가 있습니다. 'it is especially moment I want to remember it'는 어색하므로 올바른 문장 구조와 관사 사용을 익혀야 합니다. 또한 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하고 연결어를 사용해 자연스럽게 말하는 연습이 필요합니다.

Exemplo: Yes, sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the window because I want to capture special moments. For instance, I often photograph sunsets or interesting buildings so I can remember the trip later.

Sugestão: 의미는 전달되지만 반복과 어순, 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'nowadays'가 두 번 반복되었고 'I want to more move my body'는 어색한 표현입니다. 자연스러운 비교 표현과 이유 설명을 위해 접속사와 부사 위치를 수정하고 더 구체적인 이유를 제시하세요.

Exemplo: I like both, but recently I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking. Nowadays I want to be more active, so I choose mountain trips where I can exercise and enjoy fresh air.

× Yes, of course I enjoy it because there are so many scenic views. It makes me happy and feel fresh.

✓ Yes, of course I enjoy it because there are so many scenic views. They make me happy and feel refreshed.

Subject-verb agreement and parallel structure: 'It' refers incorrectly to 'scenic views' (plural), so use 'they' and plural verb 'make'. Also use the adjective 'refreshed' (past participle/adjective) instead of 'fresh' to express a feeling. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches its noun and use appropriate adjective 'refreshed' for feelings.

× Yes, sometimes I like it because it is especially moment I want to remember it.

✓ Yes, sometimes I like it because it is a special moment I want to remember.

Article and adjective form: missing article 'a' before 'special moment' and 'especially' is wrong; use adjective 'special'. Also avoid repeating 'it' unnecessarily. Suggestion: use 'a special moment' and remove redundant pronoun.

× I prefer both, but nowadays I like more hiking because nowadays I want to more move my body.

✓ I prefer both, but nowadays I prefer hiking more because I want to move my body more.

Word order and verb choice: 'like more hiking' is awkward; use 'prefer hiking more' or 'like hiking more'. 'Want to more move my body' has incorrect adverb placement; place 'more' after the verb phrase: 'want to move my body more.' Also avoid repeating 'nowadays.' Suggestion: use natural word order: 'prefer hiking more' and place 'more' after the verb.