Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct small mistakes (e.g. “snap photos of the scenery,” “take a break from my phone”).

Exemplo: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel, especially to new places. For example, I enjoy snapping photos of interesting views, which helps me relax and take a break from using my phone.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail; correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Use a linking phrase to connect the reason to the action (e.g. “so” or “which”). Correct verb forms (e.g. “remind” not “reminds”) and avoid repeating “these photos.”

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos outside the window because I am a photographer. I usually post the best shots on social media, which also remind me of the trip later.

Sugestão: Organize your answer into a clear topic sentence plus two concise supporting details. Fix tense and pronoun errors, remove hesitations, and use linking words (e.g. “because,” “for example,” “so”) to make your reasons coherent. Be specific about memories instead of repeating phrases.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because I grew up on an island and have many childhood memories there. For example, my family and I used to spend weekends swimming and fishing, so the sea feels familiar and comforting to me.

× Moreover, I like to snap some photos about this beautiful scenery and this can help me break.

✓ Moreover, I like to snap some photos of this beautiful scenery, and this can help me take a break.

The phrase 'snap some photos about' is incorrect; use the preposition 'of' with 'photos' (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11) and 'help me break' is missing the verb 'take' to form the phrase 'take a break' (Verb + -ing form not applicable but fits common collocation). Suggestion: use 'snap photos of' and 'take a break' to form natural English.

× Take a break from my phone.

✓ It helps me take a break from my phone.

This fragment lacks a clear subject and verb when standing alone; it should be connected to the previous sentence or given a subject and auxiliary verb (Sentence structure error, ID 26). Suggestion: combine with previous sentence or add subject 'It helps me' to make a complete sentence.

× For sure, I'm a photographer and I usually post these photos on my social media and these photos can reminds me of this trip in the future.

✓ For sure, I'm a photographer and I usually post these photos on my social media, and these photos can remind me of this trip in the future.

The verb 'reminds' is incorrect after modal phrase 'can'; modal + base verb requires the base form 'remind' (Third person singular issue, ID 2). Also 'these photos can remind' is the correct structure. Suggestion: use base verb after modal verbs (can, will, should).

× I would say I am a daughter of the sea since I am from an island country and some to be honest living sometimes makes me miss the sea a lot and when I was when I were a child, my father, my family, we, me and my family usually spent weekends in the sea.

✓ I would say I am a daughter of the sea since I am from an island country; to be honest, living here sometimes makes me miss the sea a lot, and when I was a child, my family and I usually spent weekends at the sea.

This sentence has multiple problems: awkward phrase 'some to be honest living' and incorrect tense/word order 'when I was when I were a child' (Sentence structure errors, ID 26). 'To be honest' should precede the clause and 'living here' clarifies meaning. Use 'when I was a child' (correct past tense) and 'my family and I' is the correct pronoun order (Incorrect use of pronouns, ID 12). Also use 'at the sea' or 'by the sea' rather than 'in the sea' for spending weekends near the sea. Suggestions: simplify and break into clauses, use 'my family and I', correct tense 'was'.

× So I feel a special connection between the sea and me.

✓ So I feel a special connection between the sea and me.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'between the sea and me' is correct pronoun usage (object form 'me'). No change needed. Suggestion: keep as is or optionally rephrase to 'I feel a special connection to the sea.' (ID 12).