Typing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons with a brief example. Avoid repeating ideas ("convenient" used twice) and reduce vague phrases like "in a way."

Exemplo: I prefer typing to handwriting because it is faster and more convenient when I have a lot of work or tight deadlines. For example, at university I type essays quickly and can edit them easily, which saves time compared with rewriting by hand.

Sugestão: Make your answer more direct and fluent: begin with a concise statement (desktop or laptop), then add a specific detail about your work. Reduce filler words and repeat information more smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, I use a desktop keyboard every day at work. As a nurse I enter patient information into electronic medical records on ward computers, so I type continuously during my shift.

Sugestão: Improve coherence and grammar: combine short fragments into complete sentences and give a specific time-frame or age. Explain briefly how you practiced typing to provide more concrete detail.

Exemplo: I learned to type in primary school, when I was about eight years old. We also had a home computer, which I used to email my father who lived abroad, so I practised typing messages every week.

Sugestão: Give a clearer method and one concrete example of improvement: state specific actions you take to improve (practice, online lessons, typing tests) and mention measurable results (speed, accuracy). Avoid repetition and filler words.

Exemplo: I improve my typing mainly through daily practice at work and short focused exercises. For instance, I spend ten minutes each evening on online typing tests and have increased my speed from about 30 to 50 words per minute over the past year.

× Handwriting makes me more artistic in a way that I can explore more about my handwriting, but it is not convenient.

✓ Handwriting makes me more artistic in that I can explore my handwriting more, but it is not convenient.

The phrase 'in a way that' is awkward and 'explore more about my handwriting' misuses 'about' with 'explore'. Use 'in that' to introduce the explanation and place 'more' after the object: 'explore my handwriting more.' This makes the sentence more natural and grammatically correct.

× I do use keyboard on a daily basis as a nurse.

✓ I do use a keyboard on a daily basis as a nurse.

The noun 'keyboard' needs an article. Use the indefinite article 'a' because it refers to a non-specific single keyboard. Adding 'a' corrects the noun phrase.

× We have this thing called electronic medical records wherein we can access their records of the patients on a desktop and by using it means using also a keyboard to access the system.

✓ We have electronic medical records where we can access patients' records on a desktop, and using it also means using a keyboard to access the system.

Replace 'wherein' with 'where' for natural speech. 'their records of the patients' is incorrect possessive order; use 'patients' records'. 'By using it means using also a keyboard' is awkward; rephrase to 'using it also means using a keyboard.' These changes fix preposition and possessive problems and improve clarity.

× I learned to type when I was in primary school.

✓ I learned to type when I was in primary school.

This sentence is correct in past tense and matches the time frame; no correction needed.

× Back then.

✓ Back then, we had a computer in the house and used it to communicate with my father, who lived abroad.

'Back then.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and subject. Combine it with the following sentence to form a complete sentence. Also change 'have' to past 'had' to match the past timeframe.

× We have a computer inside the house and we use it to communicate with my father, who lived abroad.

✓ We had a computer in the house and used it to communicate with my father, who lived abroad.

Tense mismatch: the context is past ('Back then'), so change present 'have' and 'use' to past 'had' and 'used.' Also 'inside the house' is wordy; 'in the house' is more natural.

× Or typing.

✓ As for typing,

'Or typing.' is a fragment and unclear. 'As for typing,' introduces the topic correctly and connects to the rest of the response.

× Improving my typing has been gradual rather than immediate or instant.

✓ Improving my typing has been gradual rather than immediate.

The sentence is mostly correct but 'immediate or instant' is redundant. Keep one adjective; this improves conciseness without changing tense.

× And since I use keyboard or computer on a daily basis, especially at work, I have improved a lot and that makes me advance in using keyboard.

✓ And since I use a keyboard or computer on a daily basis, especially at work, I have improved a lot, and that has helped me become more proficient at using the keyboard.

Add articles 'a keyboard' and 'the keyboard.' 'That makes me advance in using keyboard' is ungrammatical; replace with 'that has helped me become more proficient at using the keyboard' to express improvement. Change verb forms for natural phrasing and clarity.