Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid grammar mistakes (singular/plural, articles), and limit to up to 4–5 sentences. Add one specific detail and use a linking word to connect ideas. For example, correct noun forms and add a brief reason or example.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views; photography is one of my hobbies. For example, I often photograph sunsets because I like the warm colors they create. I also take photos at birthday parties to capture people’s expressions.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and repetition, correct grammar (articles, word order), and organize with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'for example'). Be concise and avoid unclear phrases.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because I go out to the farm every evening. For example, I enjoy photographing sunsets and wide landscapes, and at night I like shooting the moon and stars since the sky is very clear there.

Sugestão: Avoid filler phrases and give a direct answer first. Use one linking phrase to explain why and include a specific example. Make sentences grammatically correct and concise.

Exemplo: I don't mind whether I'm in my country or abroad; I take photos of views wherever I travel. For instance, when I visit a new city I always photograph sunsets and interesting landscapes to remember the trip.

× Yes, taking pictures of different view is my kind of hobby.

✓ Yes, taking pictures of different views is my kind of hobby.

The noun 'view' should be plural 'views' because the speaker refers to multiple kinds of scenery. Use plural form when talking about more than one item. Suggestion: Use 'views' whenever you mean various scenes or perspectives.

× I like to take pictures whenever I'm going outside such as sunsets.

✓ I like to take pictures whenever I go outside, such as of sunsets.

The phrase 'I'm going outside' is unnecessary progressive; 'whenever I go outside' (simple present) fits habitual action. Also add 'of' after 'such as' to show examples. Suggestion: Use simple present for regular habits and include prepositions for examples.

× I also like to take pictures on birthday parties and many more.

✓ I also like to take pictures at birthday parties and at many other events.

Use 'at' for events like parties, not 'on'. 'Many more' is vague; use 'many other events' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'at birthday parties' and rephrase vague phrases.

× Uh, I actually I mostly prefer views in the rural areas as I am going outside outside every day during evening.

✓ Uh, actually I mostly prefer views in rural areas, as I go outside every evening.

Remove the repeated 'I' and duplicate 'outside'. Use 'rural areas' without 'the'. Use 'go outside every evening' (simple present) for habitual action and include article 'every evening'. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and use simple present for routines.

× I like to take pictures of sunsets, different landscapes whenever I am in the farm.

✓ I like to take pictures of sunsets and different landscapes whenever I am on the farm.

Use 'on the farm' rather than 'in the farm'. Also add 'and' between items for coordination. Suggestion: Use correct preposition 'on' with 'farm' and join list items properly.

× Moreover, I also like to take pictures in the rural areas at the night where moons are clearly visit moon stars and are.

✓ Moreover, I also like to take pictures in rural areas at night, when the moon and stars are clearly visible.

The original sentence has word order and nonsensical fragments ('visit moon stars and are'). Use 'at night' (no 'the') and 'when the moon and stars are clearly visible' to express the idea. Suggestion: Simplify clause structure and use 'visible' to describe seeing celestial objects.

× Uh, well, that's a tough question to answer.

✓ Uh, well, that's a tough question to answer.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no change. Suggestion: Keep as is.

× Uh, whenever I like any view like sunsets and whenever I am going and going to attend any tour, I mostly take pictures.

✓ Whenever I see a view I like, such as a sunset, or when I am going on a tour, I usually take pictures.

Replace 'I like any view like sunsets' with 'I see a view I like' for clarity. Use 'going on a tour' rather than repeated 'going and going to attend any tour'. Use 'usually' for frequency. Suggestion: Use clearer clauses and avoid repetition.

× That doesn't matter. I am in my country or in another country.

✓ It doesn't matter whether I am in my country or in another country.

Combine sentences to express the idea properly: use 'whether' to connect the two alternatives and use 'it' as the dummy subject. Suggestion: Use 'whether... or...' to compare alternatives and 'it doesn't matter' as a fixed phrase.