Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct grammar (e.g., "the" and plural forms), and give one brief specific reason. Use one linking phrase to support your idea.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I like preserving beautiful scenes around me. For example, when I visit a lakeside or a mountain, I take photos to remember the mood and colors. This helps me revisit those memories later.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer and support it with clear, relevant reasons. Correct subject-verb agreement and vocabulary (e.g., "rural areas have" not "has"). Avoid irrelevant or confused ideas (the comment about salary is unclear). Use one or two linking words (because, whereas) to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because rural areas have more natural scenery like fields and hills. For instance, I enjoy the quiet countryside with wide-open spaces, whereas cities tend to be crowded and full of buildings.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly (state preference) and give a specific example briefly. Reduce fillers and correct phrasing (e.g., "Jammu and Kashmir is a beautiful region" not "the name of the place is"). Use linking words to add one supporting detail about why you prefer it.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country, especially in Jammu and Kashmir, because of its stunning mountains and lakes. For example, when I visit there I like to photograph snowy peaks and lush valleys to capture the region's dramatic landscapes.

× I like taking pictures of my different views because the if the environment surrounding me is very beautiful, then I felt to capture those, uh, those, those, those view.

✓ I like taking pictures of the different views around me because if the environment is very beautiful, I feel like capturing those views.

Errors: incorrect use of articles and determiners, awkward phrasing, and incorrect verb form 'felt' after conditional. Grammar problem type matched: verb in the present participle form (8) because 'taking' is fine but the sentence contains present-tense conditional and a present feeling, so 'felt' should be 'feel'. Suggestions: remove repeated filler words, use 'the different views around me' for clarity, use 'if the environment is very beautiful' (no 'the' before 'if'), and change 'then I felt to capture' to 'I feel like capturing' to use correct present-tense expression and correct verb pattern (feel like + -ing). Use plural 'views' consistently.

× Uh, basically rural areas has more view than urban areas because, umm, because rural areas is like a underdeveloped area.

✓ Basically, rural areas have more views than urban areas because rural areas are underdeveloped.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and count nouns. 'Rural areas' is plural so use 'have' not 'has' (covers grammar ID 1 and 27 but primary is singular/plural issue). 'More view' should be 'more views' (plural). 'Rural areas is like a underdeveloped area' mixes plural subject with singular verb and article; correct to 'rural areas are underdeveloped.' Suggestions: match plural subjects with plural verbs and plural nouns, avoid 'like a' when describing general property (use 'are underdeveloped').

× Uh, but the urban area is a developed area where the least amount of salary salary.

✓ But urban areas are developed and often have lower average wages for some people.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and unclear noun phrase 'the least amount of salary salary'. Primary issue addressed: third person singular/plural (ID 2) and word choice. 'Urban area is a developed area' is acceptable but inconsistent with plural 'rural areas'; better to use plural 'urban areas are developed.' The phrase 'the least amount of salary salary' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'often have lower average wages' to convey likely intended meaning. Suggestions: ensure consistent number (singular/plural) and use clear collocations like 'average wages' or 'low salaries.'

× In a country like India, there is a very beautiful place umm where the name of the place is Jammu and Kashmir.

✓ In a country like India, there is a very beautiful region called Jammu and Kashmir.

Errors: awkward 'there is a very beautiful place where the name of the place is...' Use of 'there is' is acceptable but wording is redundant. This matches 'There be issue' (ID 3). Suggestions: use 'there is ... called ...' or '... region called ...' to be concise and natural. Use 'region' rather than 'place' for Jammu and Kashmir as it is larger than a single place.

× Those umm, this Union's territory is the best union territory.

✓ This Union territory is one of the most beautiful union territories.

Errors: mixing demonstratives 'Those' and 'this' and redundant wording 'Union's territory'. This matches 'Incorrect use of pronouns' (ID 12). Also capitalisation consistency: 'Union territory'. Suggestions: choose correct demonstrative ('this' for singular nearby), avoid repetition, and use comparative or superlative carefully ('one of the most beautiful' or 'the best' if confident).

× Uh, I love to grab the pictures when I visit the JK jungle.

✓ I love taking pictures when I visit the JK forests.

Errors: verb pattern and word choice. 'Love to grab the pictures' is unnatural; use 'love taking pictures' (verb + -ing) which fits ID 8. Also 'JK jungle' is awkward; use 'the JK forests' or 'the forests of Jammu and Kashmir'. Suggestions: use 'love' + gerund for general preferences and choose natural nouns for landscapes.