Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise: avoid fillers (uh, umm), correct grammar (plural/singular), and use a clear topic sentence with one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words for coherence. Aim for 3–4 sentences and mention reasons or examples with precise vocabulary (e.g. "green spaces", "candid shots").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially green spaces and candid moments of children playing in playgrounds. I find these scenes calming and full of life, so I try to capture natural expressions and vibrant colors. For example, I often photograph the way sunlight filters through trees to create an interesting atmosphere.

Sugestão: Be direct and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference (both), then give two contrasting specific reasons with linking words (e.g. "On the one hand..., on the other hand..."). Correct grammar ("many benefits" not "a many benefits").

Exemplo: I prefer both urban and rural views. On the one hand, rural areas offer lots of greenery and peaceful scenes that are great for relaxing shots. On the other hand, urban areas provide interesting architecture and lively street scenes that make dynamic photos.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid repetitive phrases like "as you know." State your position clearly (no strong preference) and give one or two specific reasons with examples. Correct awkward phrasing ("prefer views in my own country over others"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I don't have a strong preference because many countries have beautiful and unique views. For instance, my country has familiar landscapes and cultural scenes I enjoy, while other countries offer different architecture and natural wonders that are exciting to photograph.

× I really like to capture, uh, different type of views.

✓ I really like to capture different types of views.

'Different type of views' is incorrect because 'type' must agree in number with 'different' and 'views.' Use the plural 'types' when referring to more than one kind. Also remove unnecessary commas and filler words for clarity.

× Uh, it was uh, I often take pictures of greenery children playing in playground and umm, umm, I often like to capture these type of scenes because I really love and enjoy.

✓ I often take pictures of greenery and children playing in the playground, and I like to capture these types of scenes because I really enjoy them.

The sentence mixes past marker 'it was' with present habitual 'I often take.' Remove 'it was' to maintain present habitual tense. Use 'and' to connect nouns: 'greenery and children.' Add 'the' before 'playground.' Use plural 'types' to match 'these.' Replace redundant 'love and enjoy' with a single verb 'enjoy' and add object 'them' to complete the verb.

× I prefer using both urban and rural areas because sometimes I often, I often find greenery in rural areas that are very helpful for, that is very helpful for, uh, breathing and, uh, relaxing.

✓ I prefer both urban and rural areas because I often find greenery in rural areas that is very helpful for breathing and relaxing.

Remove redundant 'using' after 'prefer' and the repeated 'sometimes I often, I often.' Keep present simple 'I often find.' Use singular 'that is' to refer to 'greenery' as a collective noun. Remove extra fillers for clarity.

× And, uh, in, uh, as we talk about urban areas, there is also a many benefits, uh, for capturing these type of views.

✓ And when we talk about urban areas, there are also many benefits to capturing these types of views.

Use 'there are' for plural 'benefits' (subject-verb agreement). Remove 'a' before 'many.' Use 'to capturing' or 'in capturing' as the correct preposition; here 'to capturing' is acceptable, but 'to' + noun is common. Use plural 'types' to match 'these.' Remove unnecessary fillers.

× As you know, as you know that many countries have different beautiful places for visitors.

✓ As you know, many countries have different beautiful places for visitors.

The phrase repeats 'as you know' twice; remove the repetition. The rest of the sentence correctly uses present simple to state a general truth.

× So I couldn't say that I prefer views in my own country upon others.

✓ So I couldn't say that I prefer views in my own country over those in other countries.

Use the correct comparative phrase 'prefer A over B' and specify the noun for clarity: 'those' refers to 'views.' 'Upon others' is unnatural; replace with 'over those in other countries.' Maintain conditional/modal phrasing 'couldn't say'.

× And you can as you know that other countries also have beautiful places for capturing use and for for enjoying different type of views.

✓ And, as you know, other countries also have beautiful places to capture and enjoy different types of views.

Remove repeated 'you can as you know that' and use 'as you know' once. Use 'places to capture and enjoy' instead of awkward 'for capturing use.' Use plural 'types' to match 'different.' Remove duplicate 'for.'