Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid minor repetition; add one specific example and connect ideas with a linking phrase. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., "the changing colors and hues excite me" is fine but keep consistent tense). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I love photographing different views, especially sunsets because the changing colors are so striking. For example, last summer I photographed a sunset at Marina Beach where the sky shifted from orange to deep purple, and the contrast with the silhouetted palm trees made a memorable picture. I also enjoy coastal horizons because they give a strong sense of depth.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise reasons with a linking word and a specific example to support your preference. Avoid redundancy ("rural areas rather than urban areas" can be shortened).

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and greener. For instance, when I visit the countryside I enjoy walking among rice fields and trees, which helps me relax after spending most of my time in a busy city.

Sugestão: Improve coherence and completeness: finish your comparison and avoid repetition and grammar mistakes (remove duplicate words like "is is" and unnecessary fillers). Use linking words for contrast and give a complete, specific example of both regions. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because India offers great variety. For example, in the north the Himalayas provide dramatic mountain scenery, whereas the southern coasts have wide sandy beaches and palm-lined shorelines. This variety means I can enjoy very different landscapes without traveling abroad.

× I also find taking pictures of different horizons, such as at the beach when the sky meets the ocean.

✓ I also enjoy taking pictures of different horizons, such as at the beach where the sky meets the ocean.

The original sentence is awkward because 'find taking pictures' is unusual; 'enjoy taking pictures' is more natural. Also 'when the sky meets the ocean' is better expressed as 'where the sky meets the ocean' to indicate location. Use 'enjoy' (present simple) to match the ongoing preference. Suggestion: replace 'find taking pictures' with 'enjoy taking pictures' and use 'where' for location.

× I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban areas as I grew up in a city and I enjoy taking a break from cityscapes to look at more quiet, green and natural landscapes to relax and unwind.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban ones because I grew up in a city and enjoy taking a break from cityscapes to look at quieter, greener, more natural landscapes to relax and unwind.

Use 'ones' to avoid repetition of 'areas' (conciseness). 'As' at the start can be ambiguous; 'because' clarifies reason. The adjectives describing 'landscapes' should follow correct comparative and parallel adjective order: 'quieter, greener, more natural' and commas between adjectives. Also remove the second 'I' for smoother rhythm. Suggestion: use 'ones' to avoid repetition, use 'because' for clarity, and order adjectives as comparative where appropriate.

× I prefer views in my own country as India has a diverse geographical landscape to enjoy.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because India has a diverse geographical landscape to enjoy.

Using 'as' to give a reason is acceptable but can sound formal or ambiguous; 'because' is clearer in spoken responses indicating reason. No tense change needed. Suggestion: replace 'as' with 'because' for clearer causal connection.

× For example, northern India is beautifully covered in mountains where whereas the coastal region obviously is is filled with beautiful.

✓ For example, northern India is beautifully covered with mountains, whereas the coastal regions are filled with beautiful beaches and scenery.

Multiple issues: 'where whereas' is redundant—use either 'where' or 'whereas'; 'is is' is a duplication typo; 'filled with beautiful' is incomplete—'beautiful' needs a noun (e.g., 'beaches and scenery'). Also subject-verb agreement: 'coastal regions are' (plural) or 'the coastal region is' (singular). Rewriting clarifies contrast and completes the idea. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, use 'whereas' to contrast, provide the missing noun after 'beautiful', and ensure subject-verb agreement.