Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: คำตอบโดยรวมดี มีประโยคเริ่มต้นที่ชัดเจนและเนื้อหาสนับสนุน แต่ควรสั้น กระชับ และเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น หลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำซ้อน เช่น ‘taking photos of’ และ ‘sharing them’ ที่สามารถรวมได้ นอกจากนี้ควรใช้ linking word เล็กๆ เพื่อทำให้ลื่นไหล และจำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 4-5 ประโยค

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photography as a relaxing hobby. I often capture landscapes and cityscapes, then post my best shots on social media to get friends' feedback.

Sugestão: ประเด็นดีที่ระบุเหตุผลและยกตัวอย่าง แต่มีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์ คำบางคำใช้ผิด (เช่น ‘allied’ ควรเป็น ‘allied’ ไม่เหมาะสม) และประโยคยาวเกินไป ควรใช้โครงสร้างที่ชัดเจน: ประโยคหัวข้อ + เหตุผลสั้นๆ + ตัวอย่าง โดยใช้ linking words เช่น ‘because’ หรือ ‘for example’ ให้ถูกต้อง

Exemplo: I prefer urban areas because I like the skyline and tall buildings. Also, I enjoy people-watching; for example, walking in the city often gives me a sense of lively atmosphere and interesting scenes.

Sugestão: คำตอบมีความหมายแต่ผิดคำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์หลายจุด (‘wheels’ ผิด ควรเป็น ‘views’; tense และคำสรรพนามไม่สอดคล้อง เช่น ‘they will fond memories’) ควรใช้ประโยคหัวข้อชัดเจนตามด้วยเหตุผลที่เป็นรูปธรรม และใช้ tense และสรรพนามอย่างถูกต้อง รวมทั้งย่อความให้ไม่เกิน 3-4 ประโยค

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I'm familiar with the landscapes and they bring back fond memories with my family. For example, the coastal scenery near my hometown always feels comforting and helps me appreciate our local culture.

× Photography is my relaxing hobby.

✓ Photography is a relaxing hobby of mine.

The original sentence uses possessive meaning but sounds unnatural; revise to 'a relaxing hobby of mine' to use correct possessive structure and natural phrasing.

× I enjoy taking photos of landscapes and cityscapes and sharing them with friends on social media to give their feedback.

✓ I enjoy taking photos of landscapes and cityscapes and sharing them with friends on social media to get their feedback.

The phrase 'to give their feedback' is incorrect because it implies friends give feedback to others; use 'to get their feedback' to indicate receiving feedback from friends.

× I prefer urban areas because allied city skyline and high rise buildings and I enjoy people watching in busiest days.

✓ I prefer urban areas because of the city skyline and high-rise buildings, and I enjoy people-watching on the busiest days.

Multiple issues: missing preposition 'because of' before reasons, 'allied' is incorrect word choice, 'high rise' should be hyphenated 'high-rise', 'people watching' as a noun should be hyphenated 'people-watching', and preposition 'in busiest days' should be 'on the busiest days'. These corrections fix word choice, hyphenation, and preposition usage.

× For example, when I walk in the city I find a lively atmosphere and variety of scenes very interesting.

✓ For example, when I walk in the city, I find the lively atmosphere and the variety of scenes very interesting.

Add commas for the dependent clause, and include definite articles 'the' before 'lively atmosphere' and 'variety of scenes' for clarity and naturalness.

× I personally prefer wheels in my own country because I'm familiar with the landscape and they will fond memories of time spent with my family.

✓ I personally prefer views in my own country because I'm familiar with the landscape and it brings back fond memories of time spent with my family.

Original has multiple errors: 'wheels' is incorrect word; should be 'views'. 'they will fond memories' is ungrammatical; use 'it brings back fond memories' to refer to the scenery causing memories. Use singular 'it' to refer to 'views' as a general experience and correct verb phrase 'brings back'.

× For example, seeing the coastal scenery near my hometowns always feels comforting and made me appreciate our local culture.

✓ For example, seeing the coastal scenery near my hometown always feels comforting and makes me appreciate our local culture.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence mixes present 'feels' with past 'made'. Use present 'makes' to match 'always feels'. Also 'hometowns' should be 'hometown' if referring to one place; adjust for consistency.