Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct minor grammar and awkward phrasing (e.g., remove "over" and streamline sentences). Use a linking word if you add a second detail.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially natural landscapes and my family. For example, I love capturing sunsets at the lake because the warm light makes my loved ones look peaceful and the scene feels calm.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence, then support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases (e.g., "more peaceful and natural" and "it is definitely more mild" are repetitive). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "tranquil" or "unspoiled").

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they offer unspoiled nature and a tranquil atmosphere. For instance, walking along a quiet country path surrounded by trees is much more relaxing than being among busy city streets.

Sugestão: Be specific and avoid errors and repetition. State your preference clearly, list a few countries without repeating, and give one specific reason or brief example. Correct grammar (e.g., "I went there" not "I going there") and keep sentences within five and concise.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultures. For example, when I visited Japan and Thailand two years ago with my family, I was excited by the contrast between Japan’s tidy gardens and Thailand’s tropical beaches.

× It makes me feel satisfied and over.

✓ It makes me feel satisfied and content.

The phrase 'satisfied and over' is incorrect because 'over' is not an adjective that describes emotion; likely intended meaning is 'content' or 'overjoyed'. Replace 'over' with an appropriate adjective. Use 'content' or 'overjoyed' depending on intensity. Ensure adjective pairs are compatible (e.g., 'satisfied and content').

× It makes me feel satisfied and incredibly happy to take pictures of my loved ones in beautiful sceneries.

✓ Taking pictures of my loved ones in beautiful scenery makes me feel satisfied and incredibly happy.

The original sentence order is awkward; 'sceneries' is commonly uncountable when referring to scenery in general. Reorder to place the subject 'Taking pictures...' at the start for clarity and use 'scenery' instead of 'sceneries'.

× the people I love.

✓ the people I love.

This phrase is correct. 'People' is plural and matches context. No change needed.

× I definitely prefer views in rural areas compared to the urban areas because the views in the rural areas provide the natural sceneries that I love and enjoy.

✓ I definitely prefer views in rural areas to those in urban areas because rural areas offer the natural scenery that I enjoy.

Use 'prefer A to B' instead of 'prefer A compared to B'. Also use 'those in urban areas' to avoid repetition. 'Scenery' is uncountable; 'natural scenery' is preferred over 'natural sceneries'. Replace 'provide' with 'offer' for natural collocation and remove unnecessary articles 'the' before 'rural areas'.

× Rural areas are more peaceful and natural and it is definitely more mild.

✓ Rural areas are more peaceful and natural, and the climate is definitely milder.

'More mild' is grammatically acceptable but awkward; use comparative 'milder'. Also clarify what 'more mild' refers to (the climate or weather). Connect clauses with a comma and specify 'the climate' to avoid ambiguity.

× I prefer views in other countries than in my country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries to those in my country.

Use the correct comparative structure 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A than B'. Also use 'those' to refer back to 'views' to avoid repetition.

× I particularly enjoy the views in Japan and Japan, Thailand and Taiwan.

✓ I particularly enjoy the views in Japan, Thailand, and Taiwan.

The original repeats 'Japan' and has incorrect punctuation and list structure. Use a simple, correctly punctuated list separated by commas and include an Oxford comma if preferred for clarity.

× When I went there with my family two years ago, I going there and looking at the views have definitely made me more excited.

✓ When I went there with my family two years ago, going there and looking at the views definitely made me more excited.

The clause mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. 'I going there and looking at the views have' is ungrammatical. Use the past tense 'made' to match 'went', and use gerunds 'going' and 'looking' as subjects of 'made' without 'I' or auxiliary 'have'. Alternatively: '...going there and looking at the views definitely excited me.' This keeps tense consistent and corrects subject-verb agreement.