Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Clarify your main point with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and concise supporting details. Avoid unrelated phrases (e.g., “purchase on my wallet questions”) and limit to under five sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., 'however', 'because', 'for example'), and be specific about what you prefer to photograph and why.

Exemplo: I don't usually take pictures of many different views; I prefer to photograph scenes that interest me. For example, when I travel I always bring my phone and a camera because I like capturing the sea and coastal landscapes. I take photos mainly to remember how I felt in that place, rather than to collect every view.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (singular/plural and prepositions), and add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Mention particular rural features you enjoy and explain briefly why they relax you.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because I love being close to nature. For example, I enjoy seaside cliffs and quiet natural parks since the fresh air and open space help me relax and forget city noise.

Sugestão: Make a clear, complete sentence stating your preference, avoid hesitations and incomplete thoughts, and provide a specific supporting example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' and finish the example with a concrete detail. Keep it within five sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I am curious about landscapes I haven't seen before. For example, when I visited Kenya I was amazed by the vast savannahs and colorful wildlife, which were very different from the scenery at home.

× I don't like taking pictures from different views because I wanna purchase on my wallet questions.

✓ I don't like taking pictures from different viewpoints because I want to keep them in my wallet as keepsakes.

The sentence uses informal contraction 'wanna' and an unclear phrase 'purchase on my wallet questions.' Replace 'wanna' with 'want to' and clarify intent: 'keep them in my wallet as keepsakes.' Also 'from different views' is better as 'from different viewpoints.' Use standard vocabulary and clear object for the verb 'keep.'

× For example when I travel a really bring my phone and cameras for photos.

✓ For example, when I travel, I usually bring my phone and camera for taking photos.

The original has 'a really bring' which is ungrammatical. Use adverb 'usually' for frequency and 'bring' as base verb. 'Cameras' can be singular 'camera' or plural; choose 'camera' to match 'phone.' Add 'taking' (present participle) to show purpose: 'for taking photos.' Add commas for clarity.

× I wanna focus on sea sighting and how I feel.

✓ I want to focus on the sea view and on how I feel.

Use 'want to' instead of 'wanna' and 'sea sighting' is unnatural; 'sea view' or 'the sea' is better. Add 'the' before 'sea view' because a specific view is implied. Add 'on' before 'how I feel' to parallel structure.

× I really prefer views in rural area to views in other areas because I will love nature's.

✓ I really prefer views in rural areas to views in other areas because I love nature.

Use plural 'rural areas.' Use 'prefer X to Y' is correct but 'will love' is wrong here; use present 'love' to express general preference. 'Nature's' is incorrect possessive; use 'nature.'

× Nature makes me feel very relaxed and I usually go to the sea or natural park for.

✓ Nature makes me feel very relaxed, and I usually go to the sea or to a natural park for that reason.

Add comma before conjunction. 'go to the sea or natural park' needs article 'a' before 'natural park' and parallel 'to' before both objects. Add 'for that reason' to complete the purpose; original ends with preposition 'for' incomplete.

× I prefer views in other countries because I am very curious person.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I am a very curious person.

Missing article 'a' before 'very curious person.' Add it to be grammatically correct.

× So I'm really interested in, uh, the views I don't, I haven't seen.

✓ So I'm really interested in the views I haven't seen.

Remove disfluent filler 'uh' and redundant clauses 'I don't, I haven't seen.' Use the present perfect 'haven't seen' to refer to experiences up to now. The phrase should be concise and grammatically coherent.

× So for example, uh, when I've been to Kenya, I saw a very.

✓ For example, when I went to Kenya, I saw a very beautiful landscape.

Use simple past 'went' instead of 'I've been' when specifying a particular past trip. Remove filler 'uh.' The original ends abruptly with 'a very.' Complete the thought with a noun and adjective, e.g., 'a very beautiful landscape.'