Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid repetition. Aim for 2–4 sentences, e.g. “Yes, I love taking photos of different places I visit. I take them to capture memories and to share highlights on social media and with my family in Thailand.”

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking photos of the places I visit. I take them to capture special memories and, for example, I often post a few landscape shots on social media and send albums to my family in Thailand so they can see my trips.

Sugestão: Provide a direct topic sentence and then one clear specific reason with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague phrases and fix incoherent fragments. Mention one or two concrete examples and describe what you like about them. Keep within 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I enjoy open landscapes and farm scenes. For example, when I visited the Great Ocean Road and the countryside in South Australia, I loved the wide fields and peaceful atmosphere, which felt relaxing after busy city life.

Sugestão: Be careful with strong negative statements about your country—phrase them more diplomatically and give specific reasons. Start with a clear preference, then explain with one or two brief, specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague or emotionally charged words like “abuse” without context. Keep it natural and concise.

Exemplo: I generally prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing landscapes and cultural scenes that are different from what I grew up with. For example, I find the coastal scenery and greenery in New Zealand very refreshing compared with the urban areas I often saw in Thailand.

× I really like pictures, taking pictures of different places that I visited.

✓ I really like taking pictures of the different places I have visited.

The original sentence repeats 'pictures' and has awkward word order. Use the gerund 'taking pictures' without repeating 'pictures'. Use the present perfect 'have visited' to link past visits to the present context and place 'different' before 'places' for correct adjective order.

× The reason why I really like taking picture because it's just a nice way to capture memories and I can use those photos, post on social medias and show my family in Thailand as well.

✓ The reason I really like taking pictures is that it's a nice way to capture memories, and I can use those photos to post on social media and show them to my family in Thailand.

Missing linking verb and article errors: use 'The reason I really like...' followed by 'is that' to introduce the clause. 'Taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures'. Use the infinitive 'to post' after 'use those photos' and the uncountable singular 'social media'. Add 'them' to clarify 'show them to my family.'

× A couple time that I go travelling in the UH rural area, for example Great Ocean Road or UH SA.

✓ A couple of times when I went travelling in the rural areas, for example the Great Ocean Road or in SA.

Use plural 'times' after 'a couple of'. Use 'when I went travelling' (past tense) because these are past experiences. Include the article 'the' before 'Great Ocean Road' and use 'in SA' for 'South Australia' or spell it out.

× I really enjoy the scenario of farming and a big space with.

✓ I really enjoy the farming scenery and the wide open spaces.

Original has awkward phrasing 'scenario of farming' and an incomplete ending 'with.' Use 'farming scenery' and 'wide open spaces' to convey the intended meaning, and include articles for natural nouns.

× It's sad to say, but I would prefer views from other countries rather than in Thailand because I grew up seeing abuse in Thailand.

✓ It's sad to say, but I prefer views from other countries rather than from Thailand because I grew up seeing abuse there.

The speaker is stating a general preference, so use simple present 'prefer' instead of 'would prefer.' Use 'from Thailand' to parallel 'from other countries' and replace the repeated 'in Thailand' with 'there' to avoid redundancy.

× Many times I would prefer to see something different, for example in Australia or New Zealand that would be much better.

✓ Many times I prefer to see something different; for example, visiting Australia or New Zealand would be much better.

Use simple present 'prefer' for repeated preferences. The clause 'for example in Australia or New Zealand that would be much better' is a run-on and unclear; revise to 'visiting Australia or New Zealand would be much better' and add punctuation for clarity.