Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is natural and relevant with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, make your response slightly more concise (max 4–5 sentences), avoid repeating similar ideas ("preserve the moments" and "looking back at those happy memories" overlap), and add one specific example of a memorable photo to make it more vivid. Use a linking word to connect the reason and the example.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking pictures. I often use a camera to capture special occasions like my sister’s birthday party last year because photos help me preserve moments with family and friends. For example, I took a candid shot of everyone laughing during the cake-cutting, and I enjoy looking back at that photo because it reminds me of how happy we were.

Sugestão: The main idea is clear, but your answer has grammar errors, repetition, and an incomplete ending. Improve sentence structure (use past tense for upbringing: "I grew up in a big city"), remove duplicated phrases ("a different totally different"), and complete the thought about fresh air. Add one specific detail about what you like in rural views and use a linking word to connect contrast and reason.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I grew up in a big city surrounded by tall buildings, so the countryside feels completely different to me. For example, I enjoy wide open fields and quiet country roads, and the fresh air there is much more pleasant, which helps me relax.

Sugestão: Your idea is understandable but the answer contains hesitation, repetition and awkward phrasing ("could help your could make you could make you"). Make the sentence concise and grammatical, state a clear reason, and give a brief example of how a foreign view affected you. Use a linking word (e.g., "because" or "for example") to organize the answer.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I’m used to the scenery at home, so new landscapes refresh me. For example, visiting the coast in another country last year energized me — the bright colors and unfamiliar architecture changed my mood and felt inspiring.

× I think I prefer views in rural areas as I grow up in a a big city and there are tall buildings around there, so rural areas seem like a different totally different view for me and I can have some fresh air which.

✓ I think I prefer views in rural areas because I grew up in a big city with tall buildings, so rural areas seem totally different to me and I can enjoy some fresh air.

Errors: incorrect tense ('grow up' should be past 'grew up'), duplicate word ('a a'), awkward word order ('a different totally different view'), unnecessary filler ('which'), and preposition use ('around there' awkward). Suggestion: Use past tense for past life events, remove duplicates, place 'totally different' before the noun or use 'different to me', and end the sentence without the dangling 'which'. Grammar problem type ID:26.

× I often use a camera to capture special occasions like birthday parties or family trips because it helps me preserve the moments I spend with my family and my friends.

✓ I often use a camera to capture special occasions like birthday parties or family trips because it helps me preserve the moments I spend with my family and friends.

Error: redundancy in 'my family and my friends' is awkward though not strictly ungrammatical; this is an issue of wording and tense consistency. Suggestion: Use 'family and friends' for concise expression and keep present simple for habitual actions. Grammar problem type ID:6.

× I think I prefer views in other countries because I am too used to the views in my own country and I always feel different views could help your could make you could make you more energetic and bring you different mood.

✓ I think I prefer views in other countries because I am used to the views in my own country, and I feel that seeing different views can make you more energetic and put you in a different mood.

Errors: unnecessary repetition ('could help your could make you could make you'), incorrect pronoun ('your' instead of 'you' in context), awkward auxiliary usage ('could help' then repeated 'could make you'). Suggestion: Choose one modal ('can' or 'could') and avoid repetition, correct pronoun to 'you', and use a clear verb phrase ('make you more energetic' and 'put you in a different mood'). Grammar problem type ID:26.