Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is natural, relevant and well-structured with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, make sentences more concise and avoid redundant phrases (e.g. “aesthetically pleasing in the eyes” and “it makes me feel calm and at peace” overlap). Use one strong reason and one brief example. Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g. “soothing” or “tranquil” instead of repeating “calm”).

Exemplo: I enjoy photographing different views, especially streetscapes, cityscapes and mountains. Taking these photos is calming because the scenes are visually pleasing, and the images help me remember places I visited during my travels.

Sugestão: Good direct response and relevant supporting details. Improve by removing repetition (“rural rural”), combining ideas for coherence with linking words, and adding a specific example or brief comparison to make it more vivid. Also watch small grammar: say “prefer rural areas to urban areas.”

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because I enjoy nature more. For example, I like photographing mountains, rivers and farm animals, which offer peaceful scenes compared with the busy streets and bright lights of cities.

Sugestão: The answer is relevant and shows enthusiasm, but reduce minor hesitations and repetition (“I I”), and combine short sentences with linking words for fluency. Give one specific example of a memorable foreign view or photo to make the response more concrete.

Exemplo: I prefer views in foreign countries because they offer varied and novel scenes that excite me. For instance, in Japan I loved photographing narrow historic streets and colorful local dishes, which felt very different from what I see at home.

× It makes me feel calm and at peace when I take photos that are aesthetically pleasing in the eyes and also it helps me remember where I went to in my travels.

✓ It makes me feel calm and at peace when I take photos that are aesthetically pleasing, and it also helps me remember where I went on my travels.

The phrase 'aesthetically pleasing in the eyes' is redundant and awkward; simplify to 'aesthetically pleasing'. The preposition 'to' after 'went' is incorrect; use 'on my travels'. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate independent clauses. These changes improve natural phrasing and correct preposition usage (present participle phrasing kept but preposition issue is corrected).

× I prefer views in rural rural areas to urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas to urban areas.

The word 'rural' is duplicated ('rural rural areas'), which is a simple repetition error. Removing the extra word corrects the noun phrase to the proper plural form 'rural areas'.

× Although cities offer vibrant vibes and colorful lights, I still prefer the countryside because I am more into nature.

✓ Although cities offer vibrant atmospheres and colorful lights, I still prefer the countryside because I prefer being in nature.

The original 'vibrant vibes' is informal; 'vibrant atmospheres' is more appropriate. The clause 'I am more into nature' is colloquial; change to 'I prefer being in nature' for a clearer, grammatically complete sentence. This fixes sentence register and structure for clarity.

× I like taking photographs of the mountains, the animals, the water.

✓ I like taking photographs of the mountains, animals, and bodies of water.

The original list is acceptable but can be made parallel and more precise. Adding 'and' before the final item and making items parallel ('mountains, animals, and bodies of water') improves grammatical parallelism and clarity. This addresses sentence structure and parallel list formatting.

× I actually prefer views in foreign countries because they are more varied and new to me.

✓ I actually prefer views in foreign countries because they are more varied and novel to me.

'New to me' is acceptable but 'novel to me' is a more natural adjective in this context. The present tense 'prefer' is correct; this suggestion refines word choice for register while keeping tense consistent.

× It makes me excited and interested.

✓ They make me excited and interested.

The pronoun 'It' refers back to 'views', which is plural, so the correct pronoun is 'They'. This fixes subject-verb/pronoun agreement and clarifies reference.

× I I specifically enjoy taking photographs of their food, history, streets and scenery.

✓ I specifically enjoy taking photographs of their food, historical sites, streets, and scenery.

There is a duplicated 'I I' which must be reduced to a single 'I'. Also add a comma before the last item for proper list punctuation and clarify 'history' to 'historical sites' for a clearer noun phrase. This fixes repetition and improves noun precision.