Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., 'my iPhone has useful and convenient features'), avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep to maximum 3–4 short sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. I usually use my iPhone because it has useful and convenient camera features. For example, the portrait mode and wide-angle lens help me capture both landscapes and close details.

Sugestão: Clarify your main preference and avoid contradicting yourself. Use a clear topic sentence stating your choice, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Correct basic grammar (e.g., 'the atmosphere is lively' or 'I live in the countryside' depending on intent).

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I live in the countryside and enjoy the peaceful atmosphere. For example, the quiet fields and open skies are more relaxing than busy city streets.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer and avoid vague phrases. State your preference, then briefly explain why with a specific detail and a linking word (e.g., 'because', 'although'). Avoid filler words like 'uh' and repetitive adjectives.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I know the landscapes well and they feel familiar. However, I also admire places like Switzerland because its mountain scenery is exceptionally beautiful.

× Absolutely, I prefer taking pictures on my iPhone because of I iPhone have really valuable and also comfortable functions.

✓ Absolutely, I prefer taking pictures on my iPhone because my iPhone has very useful and convenient features.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and repeats 'iPhone'. Replace 'because of I iPhone have' with 'because my iPhone has' to show possession correctly (pronoun 'my' + verb 'has'). Also change 'valuable and also comfortable functions' to 'very useful and convenient features' for natural collocation and correct word choice.

× And absolutely I love taking pictures of different views.

✓ I absolutely love taking pictures of different views.

The original word order is awkward. Place the adverb 'absolutely' before the verb phrase for natural English: 'I absolutely love...'. This corrects sentence rhythm and emphasis.

× To be honest, I prefer urban areas because I live here and I live here in nature and also they are really reliable atmosphere.

✓ To be honest, I prefer urban areas because I live here and enjoy the urban environment; the atmosphere feels familiar and comfortable to me.

The original repeats 'I live here' and uses 'they are really reliable atmosphere' which is grammatically incorrect: 'they' does not match 'atmosphere' and 'reliable' is not the appropriate adjective. Rewrite to remove repetition and use correct subject-verb agreement and adjective choice ('atmosphere feels familiar and comfortable'). Present tense 'live' is fine but sentence structure and pronoun agreement needed correction.

× However, I love urban areas too because uh, for me urban areas is really beauty too.

✓ However, I love rural areas too because, for me, rural areas are really beautiful.

The original has several errors: subject-verb agreement ('urban areas is' should be 'areas are'), wrong adjective form ('beauty' should be 'beautiful'), and the sentence contradicts previous content. Assuming the student intended to say they also love rural areas, adjust noun choice and correct adjective and agreement. If they meant urban areas, change to 'urban areas are really beautiful.'

× Actually I prefer views in my own country because here is very beautiful nature for me.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in my own country because the nature here is very beautiful to me.

The original 'here is very beautiful nature for me' uses incorrect word order and article use. Use 'the nature here is very beautiful to me' to place subject before adjective and include the definite article 'the' for a general reference to the country's natural environment.

× However, in other country like Switzerland is too too the most beautiful, uh, nature.

✓ However, in other countries, like Switzerland, the nature is some of the most beautiful.

The original lacks articles and has incorrect structure: 'in other country' should be 'in other countries' (plural) or 'in another country'. 'Is too too the most beautiful' is ungrammatical repetition. Correct to 'the nature is some of the most beautiful' or 'the nature is among the most beautiful'. Also add commas around the example 'like Switzerland' for clarity.