Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear fragments like “it MU” and finish examples fully. Also limit to under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing landscapes because they look beautiful and sometimes trigger happy childhood memories. For example, cherry blossoms always remind me of spring festivals my family attended when I was young.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer then add specific reasons with linking words. Reduce hesitation and repetition (e.g., “a lot of natures,” “it it has”). Use more precise vocabulary (scenery, countryside, fresh air).

Exemplo: I prefer taking photos in rural areas. This is because the countryside offers unspoiled scenery and fresh air, which creates a peaceful atmosphere. For example, I often photograph fields and forests at sunrise because the light and colors are very beautiful.

Sugestão: Use formal phrasing (avoid “wanna”) and make the meaning specific. State your preference clearly, explain why with concrete details about seasons and sights, and correct grammar (singular/plural agreement).

Exemplo: I prefer taking pictures in my own country. I enjoy capturing the changing seasons at home because each season brings different colors and scenes, such as golden leaves in autumn or cherry blossoms in spring.

× I enjoy taking a picture of a lot of scene because it is beautiful and it MU.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of many scenes because they are beautiful and move me.

The sentence has several issues: 'a picture of a lot of scene' uses incorrect count and noun forms (plural needed: 'pictures' and 'scenes') and wrong quantifier ('many' rather than 'a lot of' before a noun). 'it is beautiful' should refer to plural 'scenes' so 'they are beautiful.' 'it MU' appears to be a fragment meaning 'it moves me'; use 'move' to agree with plural 'scenes.' To improve, use correct plural forms, appropriate quantifiers, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Sometimes it reminds me of past memories and childhood memories.

✓ Sometimes they remind me of past and childhood memories.

The pronoun 'it' does not match the plural noun 'pictures' or 'scenes' mentioned earlier; use 'they.' Also 'past memories and childhood memories' is repetitive; combine as 'past and childhood memories.' Ensure pronoun agreement and avoid repetition.

× For example cherry blossom reminds me of.

✓ For example, cherry blossoms remind me of my childhood.

The phrase ends abruptly with 'reminds me of' lacking an object. Also 'cherry blossom' should be plural when speaking generally: 'cherry blossoms.' Complete the thought by adding what they remind you of (e.g., 'my childhood'). Include a comma after 'For example' for clarity.

× I prefer taking a picture in rural area 'cause they have beautiful scenery and nature, a lot of natures.

✓ I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because they have beautiful scenery and nature.

Use plural forms 'pictures' and 'rural areas' when speaking generally. The contraction 'cause' is informal; use 'because.' 'A lot of natures' is incorrect—'nature' is an uncountable noun and does not take a plural. Remove redundant phrases; 'beautiful scenery and nature' is sufficient.

× I like it because it it has, uh, fresh air, so it reminds me of childhood memories.

✓ I like it because it has fresh air, so it reminds me of my childhood memories.

There is a duplicated 'it it' which is a typing/speech error. 'It' should refer to 'rural areas' — better to keep 'it has' but ensure clarity. Add possessive 'my' before 'childhood memories' to specify whose memories. Remove filler 'uh' in written form.

× I wanna take picture in my own country because they are seeing the season, so for example in all time there are a lot of lead with so they looks beautiful and I like it.

✓ I want to take pictures in my own country because you can see the seasons; for example, at different times there are many leaves and they look beautiful.

Multiple issues: 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to.' 'take picture' should be plural 'take pictures.' 'They are seeing the season' is ungrammatical—use impersonal construction 'you can see the seasons' or 'you can experience the seasons.' 'In all time' is incorrect; use 'at different times.' 'a lot of lead' likely means 'a lot of leaves'—correct spelling and plural. 'they looks' must be 'they look' to match plural subject. Break into clearer clauses and use correct verb forms and pronouns.