Part 1
Examinador
Where is your school?
Candidato
My school is a bit far from my house. It to it takes 15 minutes by bike. My university is located in the center of the city and there are many tourists near my university.
Examinador
Do you like your school?
Candidato
Yes, I like my skirt because when I go to my university I can communicate with many my friends and I can learn a lot of things from the professors, and I think my learnings from my home university makes my life better.
Examinador
Do you think your school is a good place to study?
Candidato
Yes, I believe so because in my home universities buildings there are many places where we can concentrate on studying. For example, in the library there are many desks, desks and chairs and many students always are studying there.
Examinador
What is the environment like at your school?
Candidato
I prefer the quiet environment at my school because that environment help me concentrate on studying and finish up my assignments. I think it is many students have the same opinion as me as mine.
Examinador
How important is interest in study?
Candidato
For me it is so important and so interesting to study something because umm, I think learning somethings uh, make our lives better and it that warnings uh, influence to our future job.
Where is your school?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: 文法の誤り("It to it takes")を修正し、冗長な表現を避けて、より自然で簡潔な回答を心がけましょう。また、場所の説明に具体的な情報を加えると良いです。
Exemplo: My school is about 15 minutes away from my house by bike. It is located in the city center, where many tourists often visit.
Do you like your school?
Pontuação: 55.0Sugestão: "skirt"は誤りで"school"に直しましょう。文が長くなりすぎているため、簡潔にし、接続詞を適切に使って論理的に話す練習をしましょう。
Exemplo: Yes, I like my school because I can meet many friends and learn a lot from my professors. These experiences have improved my life.
Do you think your school is a good place to study?
Pontuação: 70.0Sugestão: "home universities buildings"は単数形に直し、重複表現("desks, desks and chairs")を避けましょう。具体的な例を簡潔に述べ、接続詞を使って自然な流れを作りましょう。
Exemplo: Yes, I believe my university is a good place to study because it has many quiet areas. For example, the library has plenty of desks and chairs where students often study.
What is the environment like at your school?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 文法の誤り("help"→"helps")を直し、冗長な表現("I think it is many students have the same opinion as me as mine")を簡潔にしましょう。より具体的な理由を加えると良いです。
Exemplo: I prefer the quiet environment at my school because it helps me focus and complete my assignments. Many other students feel the same way.
How important is interest in study?
Pontuação: 50.0Sugestão: 言い淀み("umm", "uh")を減らし、文法を正しくし、意味が伝わるように表現を整理しましょう。具体的な理由を明確に述べることが大切です。
Exemplo: For me, having interest in studying is very important because learning new things improves our lives and can positively affect our future careers.
× It to it takes 15 minutes by bike.
✓ It takes 15 minutes by bike.
この文は冗長な表現が含まれており、'It to it'は文法的に誤りです。正しくは主語と動詞の組み合わせである'It takes'のみを使用します。不要な語句を削除することで文が明確になります。
× I like my skirt because when I go to my university I can communicate with many my friends and I can learn a lot of things from the professors, and I think my learnings from my home university makes my life better.
✓ I like my school because when I go to my university I can communicate with many of my friends and I can learn a lot of things from the professors, and I think my learning from my home university makes my life better.
'my skirt'は文脈に合わず誤りです。正しくは'school'です。また、'many my friends'は不自然で、'many of my friends'が正しい表現です。'learnings'は不可算名詞として通常使わないため、'learning'に修正しました。
× I think my learnings from my home university makes my life better.
✓ I think my learning from my home university makes my life better.
'learnings'は通常不可算名詞であり、複数形は誤りです。'learning'と単数形で使うのが正しいです。
× in my home universities buildings there are many places where we can concentrate on studying.
✓ in my home university's buildings there are many places where we can concentrate on studying.
'universities'は複数形ですが、文脈から所有格の単数形である'university's'が適切です。
× many students always are studying there.
✓ many students are always studying there.
副詞'always'は動詞の前に置くのが自然です。'are always studying'が正しい語順です。
× that environment help me concentrate on studying and finish up my assignments.
✓ that environment helps me concentrate on studying and finish up my assignments.
主語'environment'は単数なので動詞は三人称単数形の'helps'を使う必要があります。
× I think it is many students have the same opinion as me as mine.
✓ I think many students have the same opinion as me.
'it is'は不要であり、'as me as mine'は冗長です。'the same opinion as me'で十分意味が通じます。
× For me it is so important and so interesting to study something because umm, I think learning somethings uh, make our lives better and it that warnings uh, influence to our future job.
✓ For me it is very important and interesting to study something because I think learning something makes our lives better and that knowledge influences our future jobs.
'somethings'は不可算名詞'something'の誤用です。'make'は三人称単数主語に対して'makes'に修正。'warnings'は文脈に合わず'knowledge'などに変更。'influence to'は誤用で'influences'に修正し、'job'は複数形'jobs'が自然です。