School— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor place-name inconsistencies; start with a clear topic sentence stating where you studied, then give one or two specific supporting details (duration and reason for moving). Avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'to' for clarity.

Exemplo: I studied at Kalamal University. I spent about three years there because I moved from Ulster to Kalma at 20 to pursue my dream of becoming an optician.

Sugestão: Combine short points into a fluent response with varied vocabulary and correct grammar. Use one or two linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') and avoid redundancy ('wonderful and amazing'). Provide one specific example of what you liked about the school.

Exemplo: Yes, I really liked my school because the teachers were very supportive and I made good friends. For example, my classmates and I often studied together in the library from 8 am to 8 pm, which helped us prepare for exams.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer then give concise, specific supporting detail using linking words such as 'because' or 'so'. Avoid rhetorical questions and repetition; instead summarize feelings and give an example of support received.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe it was an excellent place to study because both teachers and students were welcoming. For example, they organized orientation events that helped me make friends and settle into the new town quickly.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with a specific example or brief anecdote. Use varied adjectives and linkers like 'for instance' or 'for example' to make the answer coherent. Avoid repeating words (e.g., 'very, very').

Exemplo: The atmosphere at my school was warm and inclusive. For instance, teachers offered extra help after class when I struggled with coursework, and classmates formed study groups that made me feel included.

Sugestão: Good answer structure and clear reasons. To improve, add a brief specific example and use linking phrases like 'for example' or 'therefore' to strengthen coherence. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

Exemplo: Interest in study is very important because it motivates you to work harder and enjoy learning. For example, when I was fascinated by optics, I studied longer and improved my practical skills, so I achieved better results.

× I don't go to school anymore, I work, but when I was in the university, I studied in Kalamal.

✓ I don't go to school anymore; I work now, but when I was at university, I studied in Kalamal.

Mix of present and past is acceptable but preposition and article are wrong: use 'at university' (common collocation) not 'in the university', and separate clauses with a semicolon or conjunction for clarity. Also add 'now' to clarify current work status. Suggestion: Use 'at university' and link clauses properly to improve fluency.

× I studied for about 3 years.

✓ I studied for about three years.

Numbers under ten are usually written as words in formal writing; not a grammatical error per the list but stylistic. Keep as 'three years' for formality and consistency. Suggestion: Spell small numbers as words in formal responses.

× I moved from Ulster to Kalma when I was 20 years old to pursue my dream as an optician.

✓ I moved from Ulster to Kalma when I was 20 to pursue my dream of becoming an optician.

Use 'of becoming' rather than 'as an' to express purpose or aspiration. Also 'when I was 20' is more natural than '20 years old' in this context. Suggestion: Use 'dream of becoming' for career aspirations.

× The classes were run wonderful and usually we just meet up with my friends and we go to a library and we study from 8:00 to 8:00 in the evening.

✓ The classes were run wonderfully, and usually we met up with my friends, went to the library, and studied from 8:00 in the morning to 8:00 in the evening.

'Wonderful' is an adjective; when modifying 'run' (a verb) use the adverb 'wonderfully'. Tense should be past ('met', 'went', 'studied') to match 'were run'. Also 'a library' should be 'the library' or simply 'the library' if referring to their regular place; clarify time range as '8:00 in the morning to 8:00 in the evening'. Suggestion: Use adverbs to modify verbs, maintain consistent past tense, and use articles appropriately.

× I loved my friends.

✓ I loved my friends.

Sentence is grammatically correct; kept for context continuity. No change needed. Suggestion: No action required.

× When I moved to Kalmar I didn't know anyone and I was a bit afraid not knowing anyone.

✓ When I moved to Kalmar, I didn't know anyone and I was a bit afraid of not knowing people.

Use 'afraid of' with a noun/gerund phrase. Also avoid repeating 'anyone' twice; 'people' sounds more natural in the second clause. Suggestion: Use 'afraid of' + noun/gerund and avoid repetition.

× Will I make any friends? Will I adapt to the new town, to the school?

✓ Would I make any friends? Would I adapt to the new town and to the school?

As part of reported thought in past narrative, use past-in-time modality (would) instead of present/future 'will'. This matches the past-tense context established by 'When I moved...'. Suggestion: Use 'would' for future-in-the-past context.

× But all the teachers, all the pupils, everyone made the whole experience so lovely and wonderful.

✓ But all the teachers and all the students made the whole experience lovely and wonderful.

Redundant listing ('pupils' and 'everyone') and awkward structure. Use 'students' (more common) and remove 'so' or keep one intensifier. Streamline to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: Avoid redundant words and use parallel structure.

× The teachers always had your back so if there was anything that you didn't know or you needed more time to understand, they would always help you and also the pupils around.

✓ The teachers always had my back, so if there was anything I didn't understand or I needed more time, they would always help me, and so would the other students.

Shift pronouns from second person 'you' to first person 'I' because the speaker describes personal experience. Also 'pupils around' is unnatural; 'other students' is clearer and matches plural agreement. Suggestion: Keep pronouns consistent with perspective (I/my) and use natural phrases like 'other students'.

× The students very, very nice to you and made me feel included.

✓ The students were very, very nice to me and made me feel included.

Missing auxiliary verb 'were' for past tense and incorrect pronoun 'you' should be 'me' to match the speaker. Ensure subject-verb agreement and pronoun consistency. Suggestion: Include correct past-tense auxiliary verbs and use appropriate pronouns.

× How important is interest in study?

✓ How important is interest in studying?

Use gerund 'studying' or 'the study' depending on meaning. 'Interest in studying' is the natural collocation here. Suggestion: Use 'interest in studying' to express engagement with learning.

× It is very important because when you're interested in studies, you become more ambitious, you work harder and you have fun while studying.

✓ It is very important because when you're interested in your studies, you become more ambitious, you work harder, and you have fun while studying.

Add possessive 'your' before 'studies' to specify whose studies. Also add commas for list clarity. Suggestion: Use 'your studies' to clarify possession.

× If you're not into it, everything will become more boring, less encouraging and you won't have the ambition for it.

✓ If you're not into it, everything becomes more boring and less encouraging, and you won't have the ambition for it.

Shift tense to present simple 'becomes' to match general truth; 'will' can be used but present simple is more natural in conditional general statements. Also keep 'for it' though could be omitted; maintain consistency in tense and style. Suggestion: Use present simple for general truths and keep consistent verb forms.