School— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Clarify location and use correct articles and plural/singular forms. Give a concise topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Reduce fillers like "uh" and avoid vague phrases.

Exemplo: My school is in a small city in Indonesia called Chukchakarta. It is known for its strong education system and several top universities nearby, which creates a lively academic atmosphere.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence and use correct verb forms and countability (e.g., 'has' not 'have'). Limit to one or two supporting points with linking words and avoid filler sounds.

Exemplo: Yes, I really like my school because it has many extracurricular activities and excellent facilities. Moreover, the lectures are supportive, and the campus greenery makes studying pleasant.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give one clear reason with correct noun forms and smoother phrasing. Replace 'approach' with 'offers' and avoid trailing off.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a good place to study because the university offers many scholarships and international opportunities, such as exchange programs, summer schools, and dual-degree options with partner universities.

Sugestão: Organize into a clear topic sentence and two specific details. Correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and avoid irrelevant or awkward details. Use linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: The campus environment is peaceful and clean, with many parks and benches. For example, staff regularly maintain the grounds, and students often sit in the parks to chat or feed the campus animals.

Sugestão: Start with a direct statement and give two specific effects of interest in study. Use correct grammar (no extra 's' in 'helps', use gerunds correctly) and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Interest in study is very important because it motivates people to learn and gain more experience. For instance, being curious can lead to new insights, new friends, and opportunities like studying abroad.

× My school is located on small city in Indonesia.

✓ My school is located in a small city in Indonesia.

Use of preposition: 'located in' is correct for places like cities; 'on' is incorrect. Also add the article 'a' before 'small city'. Improve by using 'located in a small city'.

× The name is Chukchakarta.

✓ Its name is Chukchakarta.

Sentence needs a possessive determiner to refer to the school. 'The name is...' is understandable but 'Its name is...' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× It's known for the educational uh students in this town and there is a lot of top university here.

✓ It's known for its educational institutions and students in this town, and there are many top universities here.

Multiple issues: 'educational students' is awkward—use 'educational institutions' or 'its students'. Number agreement: 'a lot of top university' should be 'many top universities' and matches plural noun; replace 'there is' with 'there are' for plural. Also add possessive 'its' to clarify.

× I do really like my school because it's have a lot of extracurriculars and amazing uh facilities and a lot of good nature in my university and the lecturer was so kind and helpful for all the students.

✓ I really like my school because it has a lot of extracurricular activities, amazing facilities, beautiful surroundings at my university, and the lecturers are very kind and helpful to all the students.

Verb agreement: 'it's have' is incorrect—use 'it has' (third person singular). 'Extracurriculars' is informal; use 'extracurricular activities'. 'The lecturer was' implies singular past; better 'the lecturers are' to agree with 'all the students' and present context. Use 'helpful to' rather than 'helpful for'.

× Yes, because we have a lot of scholarships and uh, my university approach some internationalization such as student mobility of international exchange or summer school or dual degree with another universities approach and.

✓ Yes, because we have many scholarships, and my university has implemented some internationalization programs such as student mobility and international exchanges, summer schools, or dual-degree programs with other universities.

'Approach' is the wrong verb; use 'has implemented' or 'offers' for programs. Number agreement: 'another universities' is wrong—use 'other universities'. Replace 'a lot of' with 'many' for countable 'scholarships'. Ensure parallel structure for list items.

× We have a lot of parks and my university have a lot of bench and uh, it's very clean and there is a lot of people was cleaning that parks and we really enjoy to sitting on the parks and talking with friends and giving food for the cats on the dogs and the fish.

✓ We have many parks and my university has a lot of benches. It's very clean and many people were cleaning the parks. We really enjoy sitting in the parks, talking with friends, and feeding the cats, dogs, and fish.

Multiple problems: 'have a lot of bench' should be 'has a lot of benches' (subject-verb agreement and plural). 'There is a lot of people was cleaning that parks' has number and tense errors—use 'many people were cleaning the parks'. 'Enjoy to sitting' is incorrect; use 'enjoy sitting'. 'Giving food for the cats on the dogs and the fish' should be 'feeding the cats, dogs, and fish'. Use 'in the parks' or 'at the parks' rather than 'on the parks'.

× It's very important because it can helps a person to gaining more experience, to having more insights, new friends, new new experience and we can explore something that we haven't really know about, for example, study abroad.

✓ It's very important because it can help a person gain more experience, have more insight, make new friends, and explore things that we don't really know about, for example, studying abroad.

Verb form errors: after modal 'can' use base form 'help' not 'helps'. Use 'gain' instead of 'to gaining' and 'have' instead of 'to having'. 'New new experience' is redundant—use 'new experiences' or 'new experience'. 'We haven't really know' is incorrect—use 'we don't really know' or 'we haven't really known', but present simple 'don't really know' fits. 'Study abroad' should be 'studying abroad' as a gerund here.