Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, avoid irrelevant personal details that don’t answer the question directly, and organize your response with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details using linking words. Also vary vocabulary and correct small grammar issues (e.g., use 'focused' instead of 'focusing').

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Because I was quite overweight at the time, learning to ride felt difficult, so my parents and I chose other activities like swimming instead. As a result, I didn’t own a bicycle growing up.

Sugestão: Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid awkward phrasing, and use clearer linking words. Provide one specific example or a brief reason to support your view, and choose more natural vocabulary (e.g., 'popular' not 'famous', 'coastal areas' instead of 'beside the seaside').

Exemplo: Yes, cycling is very popular in my country. Many people cycle for exercise and commuting, especially in coastal areas where bike paths are common. Even though the weather can be harsh at times, people still organize cycling trips on weekends.

× To be honest, growing up I was a very obese child so finding a bike was very hard and it was like a job that I couldn't accomplish.

✓ To be honest, growing up I was very obese, so finding a bike was very hard and it felt like a task I couldn't accomplish.

The original sentence mixes phrasing awkwardly but the main tense is past, which is correct. However, 'it was like a job that I couldn't accomplish' is unnatural; change to 'it felt like a task I couldn't accomplish' to keep past tense and improve idiomatic usage. Also remove redundant 'a' before 'very obese' and use a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so'.

× So I decided to stop searching for a bike and just focusing on something else.

✓ So I decided to stop searching for a bike and just focus on something else.

After the verb 'decided' + infinitive structure, parallel verbs should use the base form 'focus' not the -ing form 'focusing'. Use 'stop searching' (verb + -ing after stop is acceptable) and maintain parallelism by using 'focus' (infinitive implied by 'decided to').

× So no, I did not have a bike growing up.

✓ So no, I did not have a bike while growing up.

The simple past 'did not have' is correct. Add 'while' to improve clarity of the time phrase; this keeps the past tense and makes the sentence flow more naturally.

× Yes, as people in my country are very fit, so the bicycling is just very famous here.

✓ Yes, because people in my country are very fit, bicycling is quite popular here.

Avoid using both 'as' and 'so' together; choose 'because' for a clear cause. 'Bicycling' does not need the definite article 'the'. 'Very famous' is odd collocation for an activity; use 'quite popular' or 'very popular'. Also remove redundant words for conciseness.

× You can find people riding bikes everywhere you go, especially beside the seaside, but the weather is very harsh.

✓ You can find people riding bikes everywhere, especially by the seaside, but the weather is often harsh.

Use 'by the seaside' or 'along the seaside' rather than 'beside the seaside'. 'Everywhere you go' is redundant with 'everywhere'; simplify. 'The weather is very harsh' is grammatical but 'often harsh' better conveys frequency; keep tense present simple for general truth.

× Although the weather is harsh, people still go on bicycling trips.

✓ Although the weather is harsh, people still go on bicycle trips.

'Bicycling trips' is understandable but 'bicycle trips' or 'bike trips' is more natural. 'Go on' followed by a noun phrase is correct. The present simple 'is' and 'go' are appropriate for habitual actions.