Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, remove fillers (uh, actually), correct grammar (tense and articles), and use one or two supporting details with linking words. For example, mention who you shared with and why, then add a brief feeling or result.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I shared one bicycle with my sister because my family couldn’t afford more, so we took turns using it. As a result, riding together became a fun way for us to spend time outdoors.

Sugestão: Be specific and correct grammar; avoid vague terms like "most of them." Use linking words to structure reasons and an example. Mention who uses bikes (commuters, students) and a clear reason (infrastructure, cost-effective).

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in Thailand because many cities have dedicated bike lanes and cycling is an affordable way to commute. For instance, students and office workers often cycle short distances to avoid traffic and save money.

× Yes, I had a bike and actually it was my shared bike with my siblings because we cannot afford uh, a lot of bikes we so we have only, we had only 1 bike and share together with my sister.

✓ Yes, I had a bike, and actually it was my shared bike with my siblings because we could not afford many bikes, so we had only one bike and shared it with my sister.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses ('had' vs 'cannot/ have') and contains awkward phrasing. Use past tense throughout when talking about childhood: 'could not afford' instead of 'cannot afford', 'had only one bike' instead of 'have only', and 'shared it' to indicate a completed past action. Also change 'a lot of bikes' to 'many bikes' and spell out the number 'one' for formality. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past), use 'could' for past ability/permission, and use correct past verbs ('had', 'shared').

× Yeah, it is quite famous in my country because, umm, in Thailand we have a lot of streets that it uh, has a bike lane.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because in Thailand we have many streets that have bike lanes.

The original has awkward subject-reference and redundant words ('it uh, has'). Use plural 'bikes are' to refer to bikes generally. 'A lot of streets' is better as 'many streets'. The relative clause should be 'that have bike lanes' because 'streets' is plural and requires the plural verb 'have'. Remove filler words and streamline the sentence. Suggestions: use correct subject-verb agreement and clear relative clause structure ('streets that have bike lanes').

× So most of them uh, travel or going to another location by bike.

✓ So most people travel or go to other places by bike.

The sentence mixes verb forms ('travel or going') and uses 'them' unclearly. Use a consistent present simple tense for habitual actions: 'most people travel' or 'most people go'. Use 'go to other places' instead of 'going to another location' for natural phrasing. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestions: choose one verb form (travel or go) and ensure subject is clear ('most people').