Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문법과 시제 사용이 일관되지 않고 문장이 어색하게 연결되어 있습니다. 특히 과거 사실을 말할 때는 과거 시제 사용(예: wanted, wanted to)과 자연스러운 이유 제시(예: to go to school)로 표현을 정리해야 합니다. 또한 답변은 한두 문장으로 명확한 주제문을 제시하고, 추가 설명은 연결어(so, because, so that 등)를 사용해 간결하게 덧붙이세요. 예문을 구체적으로 하고 중복 표현(‘because I want to’ 반복)을 피하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I wanted a bike when I was a child because it was an easy way to get to school, and I enjoyed the freedom of riding around my neighborhood.

Sugestão: 중복 표현과 어휘 선택(‘traffic transactions’는 부적절)이 눈에 띕니다. 질문에는 일반적인 의견을 먼저 말하고, 도시 예시를 들며 구체적 이유(교통 혼잡, 환경 의식, 대중교통 대안 등)를 명확히 제시하세요. 연결어(for example, because, so) 사용은 좋지만 문장을 더 간결하고 자연스럽게 다듬어야 합니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular. For example, in Seoul many people choose cycling because traffic congestion is severe and biking is often faster for short trips.

× Yes, I did, because I want to.

✓ Yes, I did, because I wanted to.

The student used present tense 'want' after referencing a past context ('I did' meaning in the past). This is a tense inconsistency. Use past tense 'wanted' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: Keep verbs in the same time frame; after 'when I was a child' or 'I did' use past tense verbs.

× I wanted to ride a bike when I was child because I want to go to my school by riding a bike.

✓ I wanted to ride a bike when I was a child because I wanted to go to school by riding a bike.

Multiple issues: missing article ('a child' -> 'a child' fixed), and inconsistent tense (present 'want' should be past 'wanted') and awkward phrase 'my school' (use 'school' unless specifying which school). Also prefer 'by riding a bike' or 'to ride my bike to school'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past situations and include necessary articles.

× Yes, yes, I think there are so many people who ride a bike because in Seoul, for example, in Seoul, Korea, there are many traffic transactions, so people prefer to ride their own bike.

✓ Yes, yes, I think there are many people who ride bikes because in Seoul, for example, there is a lot of traffic, so people prefer to ride their own bikes.

Issues corrected: 'so many' -> 'many' is acceptable but simplified; 'ride a bike' -> plural 'ride bikes' to match general statement (singular/plural alignment); 'in Seoul, for example, in Seoul, Korea' contained unnecessary repetition so removed duplicate; 'traffic transactions' is incorrect collocation — use 'traffic' or 'heavy traffic'; 'people prefer to ride their own bike' -> plural 'bikes' to match 'people'. Also ensure present tense is correct for general truths. Suggestion: Use correct collocations ('traffic' not 'traffic transactions'), avoid repetition, and match singular/plural consistently.