Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be grammatical, concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary words. For example, correct verb forms and articles: “I didn’t have a bike when I was a child.” You can add a short reason or memory: “because my family couldn’t afford one” or “so I often walked to school.”

Exemplo: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Because my family prioritized other expenses, I usually walked to school instead, and sometimes I borrowed a neighbor’s bike for short rides.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear opinion and use coherent linking words. Use correct grammar and avoid redundant phrases (e.g., drop “of” after afford). Provide a specific reason and, if possible, a short example or comparison. For instance: “Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines, but many people cannot afford to buy one.” Then add a brief supporting detail: “As a result, they rely on walking or public transport.”

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines, especially in rural areas. However, many people cannot afford to buy one, so they often rely on walking or inexpensive public transport instead.

× I I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't have' with the past time phrase 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'didn't have' for actions or states in the past. Also remove the duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: use 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.' or 'I didn't have any bikes when I was a child.'

× The Philippines, it's really popular, but as many people are experiencing poverty, so many people cannot really afford of buying even 1.

✓ In the Philippines, they are really popular, but because many people are experiencing poverty, many cannot afford to buy even one.

Multiple issues: 'The Philippines' needs preposition 'In' to indicate location. The clause 'it's really popular' is unclear for plural 'bikes' so use 'they are really popular'. 'As' plus 'so' together is redundant; use 'because' or 'as'. 'Cannot really afford of buying' is incorrect collocation: correct form is 'cannot afford to buy' (verb + to-infinitive) and spell out numbers as 'one' in formal speech. Suggestion: 'In the Philippines, bikes are really popular, but because many people are experiencing poverty, many cannot afford to buy even one.'