News— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều từ ngữ thừa và lặp lại như "I I" và "umm" khiến câu trả lời không tự nhiên. Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngập ngừng và nói rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có thể được rút gọn để hiệu quả hơn.

Exemplo: Yes, I am interested in news because I study communication, so keeping up with current trends helps me in my job and daily tasks.

Sugestão: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ "every hours" không đúng, nên là "every hour" hoặc "frequently". Câu trả lời cũng hơi dài và thiếu sự liên kết mạch lạc. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

Exemplo: I usually check news every hour on social media platforms like Facebook, TikTok, and Instagram because they provide official updates quickly.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng, ví dụ "I don't like work as a journalist as suitable for me" không đúng. Bạn nên luyện tập cách diễn đạt ý kiến rõ ràng và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng ngữ pháp.

Exemplo: I wouldn't like to be a journalist because I prefer jobs that allow me to be creative and improve my communication skills.

Sugestão: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và nói rõ ràng hơn. Ví dụ, "because now because recently" là thừa và gây khó hiểu. Hãy sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

Exemplo: Yes, I read the news this morning on social media. There was a lot of useful information, but some news was sad because of recent accidents.

Sugestão: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ như "trending trending" và sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể cụ thể hơn để tăng tính thuyết phục.

Exemplo: Yes, I often discuss news and trending topics on social media with my friends, especially about showbiz and celebrities.

× Yes, of course I I work in umm, communication major so uh, updating news and trendy information is extremely useful for me to get on well with my job and my daily tasks.

✓ Yes, of course I work in the communication major, so updating news and trendy information is extremely useful for me to get on well with my job and my daily tasks.

The original sentence contains a repeated word 'I I' which is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'I'. Also, 'communication major' needs the definite article 'the' before it to specify the field of study. The rest of the sentence is grammatically correct.

× Every day and every hours I often surf for the news and the changing information on every social platforms that I use like Facebook, Tiktok, Instagram and they all get well with the new officially.

✓ Every day and every hour I often surf the news and the changing information on every social platform that I use like Facebook, TikTok, Instagram, and they all keep up well with the news officially.

The phrase 'every hours' is incorrect; it should be 'every hour' because 'hour' is singular after 'every'. The preposition 'surf for the news' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'surf the news'. 'Social platforms' should be singular 'social platform' after 'every'. Also, 'get well with the new officially' is unclear and corrected to 'keep up well with the news officially' to convey the intended meaning.

× I don't like work as a journalist as suitable for me.

✓ I don't like to work as a journalist as it is not suitable for me.

The verb 'like' is usually followed by the infinitive form 'to work' rather than the base form 'work'. Also, the phrase 'as suitable for me' is incomplete and needs a subject and verb to form a complete clause, so 'as it is not suitable for me' is added.

× I like to work in some majors with our creative and helps me to develop my creativity and communication skills.

✓ I like to work in some majors that are creative and help me to develop my creativity and communication skills.

The pronoun 'our' is incorrect here; it should be 'that are' to describe the majors. Also, the verb 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with the plural subject 'majors'.

× Yes, of course, and today my social platforms brought many useful information for me, but some of them were quite sad because now because recently there are many accidents.

✓ Yes, of course, and today my social platforms brought me much useful information, but some of it was quite sad because recently there have been many accidents.

The noun 'information' is uncountable, so 'many' should be replaced with 'much'. 'Brought many useful information for me' is awkward; 'brought me much useful information' is better. 'Some of them' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable; 'some of it' is correct. The phrase 'because now because recently' is redundant; 'because recently' suffices. Also, 'there are many accidents' should be 'there have been many accidents' to indicate recent past events.

× I always like to talk with my friends about the news and trending trending topics on social platforms and we often discuss about the showbiz news and some news about celebrities.

✓ I always like to talk with my friends about the news and trending topics on social platforms, and we often discuss showbiz news and some news about celebrities.

The verb 'discuss' does not require the preposition 'about'; it should be 'discuss showbiz news' instead of 'discuss about the showbiz news'. Also, the word 'trending' is repeated unnecessarily and should appear only once.