News— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih natural dan efektif. Gunakan kalimat yang lengkap dan hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'documentary movie about my country?'.

Exemplo: I'm not very interested in news generally, but because my country is currently in chaos, I have started reading news and watching documentaries about it.

Sugestão: Perbaiki penggunaan waktu kata kerja dan hindari pengulangan kata serta filler seperti 'uh'. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur.

Exemplo: I usually find news on my social media timeline or on TikTok's VIP section. Sometimes, I also search on Google or ask an AI for the latest news.

Sugestão: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan hindari pengulangan kata. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur untuk menjelaskan alasan dengan lebih baik.

Exemplo: Becoming a journalist was my dream when I was in senior high school. However, I find it difficult to communicate with people, so I gave up on that dream.

Sugestão: Perbaiki tata bahasa, kejelasan, dan struktur kalimat. Hindari kalimat yang membingungkan dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih spesifik dan jelas.

Exemplo: Yes, I read the news this morning. It was bad news because my president, Prabowo, said that Indonesia is supporting Israel, which I disagree with.

Sugestão: Perbaiki pengulangan kata dan tata bahasa. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas untuk menyampaikan ide.

Exemplo: As I mentioned earlier, my country is going through a chaotic period, so I talk with my friends about the news almost every day.

× Actually not really but since my country right now is in chaos so I interested to read some news or even I watch some documentary video.

✓ Actually, not really, but since my country right now is in chaos, I am interested in reading some news or even watching some documentary videos.

The sentence lacks the correct modal verb 'am' to express the present continuous interest. Also, 'interested to read' should be 'interested in reading' and 'I watch' should be 'watching' to maintain parallel structure and correct verb forms.

× Documentary movie about my country?

✓ A documentary movie about my country?

The sentence is a fragment missing an article 'A' to be grammatically correct. Adding 'A' makes it a proper noun phrase.

× I usually found it in my page uh, sorry, in my timeline in my social media or my VIP in Tiktok and sometimes it's just Googling it or even ask an AI to the news uh, newest news today.

✓ I usually find it on my page, uh, sorry, on my timeline in my social media or my VIP on TikTok, and sometimes I just google it or even ask an AI for the newest news today.

The verb 'found' is past tense but the adverb 'usually' indicates present habitual action, so 'find' is correct. Also, prepositions 'in' should be 'on' for pages and timelines. 'Googling' should be 'google' to match the auxiliary 'just'. 'Ask an AI to the news' should be 'ask an AI for the newest news' for correct preposition and article usage.

× Being to be a journalist was my dreams when I was in Senior High School.

✓ Being a journalist was my dream when I was in Senior High School.

'Being to be' is incorrect; 'Being' alone suffices. Also, 'dreams' should be singular 'dream' to match the subject.

× But The thing is I don't think that I can communicate with people easily. I I, I found it myself hard to communicate and so I just quit my dream.

✓ But the thing is, I don't think that I can communicate with people easily. I found it hard to communicate myself, so I just quit my dream.

The phrase 'found it myself hard' is awkward; 'found it hard to communicate myself' is clearer. Also, capitalization of 'The' should be lowercase 'the'.

× Yes, I have read the news this morning and it is it was the bad news 1 because my president Prabowo was sad said that Indonesia is boarding Israel, which means I disagree with that statement from it is not.

✓ Yes, I have read the news this morning and it was bad news because my president Prabowo sadly said that Indonesia is bordering Israel, which means I disagree with that statement because it is not true.

'Is it was' is redundant; 'it was' is correct. 'Sad said' should be 'sadly said' (adverb). 'Boarding' is incorrect; the correct word is 'bordering'. The sentence is also clarified for meaning and grammar.

× As I have said before, because of my country right now is in chaotic in chaotic, chaotic period.

✓ As I have said before, my country right now is in a chaotic period.

The phrase 'in chaotic in chaotic, chaotic period' is repetitive and incorrect. 'In a chaotic period' is the correct form with the article 'a' and adjective 'chaotic'.

× So I I think that it is almost every day I have conversation with my friends about news in our country.

✓ So I think that almost every day I have conversations with my friends about the news in our country.

'I have conversation' should be plural 'conversations' to match 'almost every day'. Also, 'about news' should be 'about the news' with the definite article.