Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using simpler sentence structures and correct grammar. Also, avoid redundancy and clarify your points. For example, say "Yes, my parents encouraged me to share because it is an important value in our Indian culture."

Exemplo: Yes, my parents encouraged me to share because it is an important value in our Indian culture. They taught me that sharing helps build good relationships and shows kindness.

Sugestão: Your answer is too long and unclear with many fillers. Try to be concise and use linking words to organize your ideas. Also, avoid repetition and improve vocabulary. For example, say "I usually share study materials like pens, notebooks, and assignments with my friends because it helps them and makes me feel good."

Exemplo: I usually share study materials such as pens, notebooks, and assignments with my friends because it helps them and gives me a sense of satisfaction.

Sugestão: Try to express your ideas more clearly and use correct grammar. Avoid vague phrases and be specific. For example, say "I prefer not to share my personal belongings that I use daily, but if I have extra items, I am happy to share them with others."

Exemplo: I prefer not to share my personal belongings that I use daily, but if I have extra items, I am happy to share them with others who need them.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and be more specific. For example, say "Yes, I think more people will share cars because not everyone owns one. Friends often share cars in emergencies, but sometimes it can cause problems like accidents."

Exemplo: Yes, I think more people will share cars because not everyone owns one. Friends often share cars in emergencies, but sometimes it can cause problems like accidents.

× Yes they did, they taught me to share the items with the others because it's one of the ethics and important concept we Indian self keeping in our life.

✓ Yes, they did. They taught me to share items with others because it is one of the ethical and important concepts we Indians keep in our lives.

The phrase 'the items' and 'the others' is incorrect here; 'items' and 'others' should be used without 'the' as they refer to general things and people. 'One of the ethics and important concept' should be 'one of the ethical and important concepts' to correctly use plural and adjective forms. 'We Indian self keeping in our life' is incorrect; it should be 'we Indians keep in our lives' to use the correct plural noun and verb form.

× I usually share with my friends my study item.

✓ I usually share my study items with my friends.

The phrase 'my study item' is singular but the context suggests multiple items, so 'items' should be plural. Also, the word order is improved by placing 'my study items' before 'with my friends' for clarity.

× It may be some equipments like pen, pencil or paper and some kind of, uh, notebook works and some kind of assignments or other, uh, information, knowledge, anything that will help to my friends, I will share with them if I possess that one that give me a feeling of self esteem and, uh, content content.

✓ It may be some equipment like pens, pencils, or paper, some kinds of notebooks, assignments, or other information and knowledge. Anything that will help my friends, I will share with them if I possess it, which gives me a feeling of self-esteem and contentment.

'Equipments' is incorrect; 'equipment' is an uncountable noun. 'Pen, pencil' should be pluralized to 'pens, pencils' to match 'some'. 'Notebook works' is unclear; 'kinds of notebooks' is better. 'Some kind of assignments' should be 'some kinds of assignments' or simply 'assignments'. 'Help to my friends' should be 'help my friends'. 'If I possess that one' should be 'if I possess it'. 'That give me' should be 'which gives me' to agree with singular subject. 'Content content' is redundant; 'contentment' is the correct noun.

× I don't like to share my private things to others that if the private things means the things stuff that daily using and I'm not preferring to share with the others.

✓ I don't like to share my private things with others, meaning the things I use daily, and I prefer not to share them with others.

The phrase 'share my private things to others' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'with'. 'That if the private things means the things stuff that daily using' is unclear and ungrammatical; it is corrected to 'meaning the things I use daily'. 'I'm not preferring to share with the others' should be 'I prefer not to share them with others' for correct verb usage and pronoun reference.

× Otherwise if something I have excess amount, I will surely share with the others if someone need it.

✓ Otherwise, if I have an excess amount of something, I will surely share it with others if someone needs it.

'Something I have excess amount' is incorrect; it should be 'if I have an excess amount of something'. 'Share with the others' should be 'share it with others'. 'If someone need it' should be 'if someone needs it' to agree in number and tense.

× Yes, car is one of the items that the friends sharing between each other.

✓ Yes, a car is one of the items that friends share with each other.

'Car' needs an article 'a' as it is singular and countable. 'The friends' should be 'friends' without 'the' for general reference. 'Sharing between each other' is incorrect; it should be 'share with each other'.

× Because someone of our friends doesn't possess a car and if he wants to go somewhere else for an emergency, our friends are ready to share car with them.

✓ Because some of our friends don't possess a car, and if they want to go somewhere in an emergency, our friends are ready to share a car with them.

'Someone of our friends' should be 'some of our friends'. 'Doesn't' should be 'don't' to agree with plural subject 'some friends'. 'He' should be 'they' to match plural subject. 'Go somewhere else for an emergency' is better as 'go somewhere in an emergency'. 'Share car' needs an article 'a car'.

× But sometimes it may arise as a difficulty for us and if there is something accidents or happen if they are.

✓ But sometimes it may cause difficulties for us, especially if there is an accident or something happens.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'It may arise as a difficulty' is incorrect; 'it may cause difficulties' is better. 'If there is something accidents or happen if they are' is incorrect and unclear; corrected to 'especially if there is an accident or something happens' for clarity and grammatical correctness.