Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense, and avoid repeating ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share my belongings with family and friends. Since I grew up in a joint family, sharing was a common practice as we divided everything among all members. Therefore, sharing has become a natural habit for me.

Sugestão: Your answer covers the question well but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and using linking words for coherence. Also, be careful with sentence structure and word order to make your answer clearer.

Exemplo: I usually share many things with my friends, such as study notes and the food I bring for lunch. Besides that, we also share gadgets, clothes occasionally, and sometimes even gossip, which helps strengthen our friendship.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly with correct sentence structure. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and explain your reasons logically using linking words.

Exemplo: Although I am comfortable sharing many things, I prefer not to share my clothes because it makes me uncomfortable due to hygiene reasons. Similarly, I avoid eating food that belongs to others as it may not be clean.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and express your opinion clearly and concisely. Avoid repeating words and check verb forms.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe more people will share cars in the future because it can reduce traffic congestion and decrease pollution. Sharing cars means fewer vehicles on the road, which benefits the environment and makes commuting easier.

× Is definitely my parents always encouraged me to share my things with family and friends.

✓ My parents have definitely always encouraged me to share my things with family and friends.

The original sentence lacks a proper subject and verb agreement. 'Is definitely my parents' is incorrect; it should be 'My parents have definitely always encouraged' to correctly use the present perfect tense and subject-verb agreement.

× So sharing become habitual to me become.

✓ So sharing became habitual to me.

The verb 'become' is incorrectly repeated and not in the past tense. The correct past tense form 'became' should be used once to indicate a completed action in the past.

× Apart from this, we do share some gossip with each other, our gadgets, even our sometimes our clothes.

✓ Apart from this, we share some gossip with each other, our gadgets, and sometimes our clothes.

The phrase 'even our sometimes our clothes' is redundant and incorrectly structured. Removing the extra 'our' and adding 'and' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I usually comfortable sharing many of my things, but I prefer not to share my clothes because it made me a bit uncomfortable.

✓ I am usually comfortable sharing many of my things, but I prefer not to share my clothes because it makes me a bit uncomfortable.

The adjective 'comfortable' needs a linking verb 'am' to form the correct predicate. Also, 'made' should be 'makes' to maintain present tense consistency.

× Because of the hygiene matters, I don't like to wear clothes.

✓ Because of hygiene concerns, I don't like to wear clothes that belong to others.

The phrase 'Because of the hygiene matters' is awkward; 'hygiene concerns' is more natural. Also, the sentence lacks clarity about whose clothes are being referred to.

× Foods that are owned by other person and if it this makes any other person.

✓ I don't like to wear clothes or eat food that belongs to other people because it makes me uncomfortable.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining the ideas into a complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, definitely it would be a great choice for every person around in the world because in this way there would be a less traffic congestion on the roads and moreover pollution will some what will be degraded as less people will driving car and there will be less less cars, less pollution.

✓ Yes, definitely it would be a great choice for everyone around the world because this way there would be less traffic congestion on the roads, and moreover, pollution would somewhat decrease as fewer people would be driving cars, resulting in fewer cars and less pollution.

The sentence has multiple modal verb and article errors. 'Less traffic congestion' is correct without 'a'. 'Pollution will somewhat will be degraded' is incorrect; 'pollution would somewhat decrease' is better. 'Less people' should be 'fewer people' for countable nouns. Also, 'will driving car' should be 'would be driving cars' to maintain correct modal verb usage and plural form.