Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，且有重复词汇。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的表达。

Exemplo: Yes, my parents taught me to share from a young age because they believed it helps build close friendships and develops a sense of responsibility.

Sugestão: 回答中表达不够清晰，存在语法错误和词汇使用不当。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免语法错误，并使句子更连贯。

Exemplo: I like to share my toys because it helps us play together and become better friends. Also, I sometimes share meals with others so we can enjoy different tastes together.

Sugestão: 回答不完整且表达混乱，缺乏具体细节。建议明确列出不适合分享的事物，并用完整句子表达。

Exemplo: Some things are not suitable for sharing, such as close friendships, because sharing friends can make people feel lonely. Also, personal items like money or passwords should not be shared.

Sugestão: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和表达方式。

Exemplo: Recently, I traveled abroad and bought some gifts to share with my friends. Also, I learned to cook dinner and wanted to share the food with them.

Sugestão: 回答较好，但有语法错误和表达不够简洁。建议注意主谓一致，简化句子结构，使表达更自然。

Exemplo: The first person I would share good news with is my parents because they are very important to me and always support me. Sharing good news with them makes me feel connected.

Sugestão: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不连贯的问题。建议使用完整句子，避免重复和语气词，表达更清晰。

Exemplo: I usually share good news with my friends, such as getting high scores in exams or being accepted to a reputable university.

× Yes, my parents always taught me to share when I was a child on 1st day.

✓ Yes, my parents always taught me to share when I was a child from the first day.

句中“on 1st day”用法不正确，应该用“from the first day”表示从第一天开始。这里涉及介词使用错误，属于过去时态描述中的介词错误。

× They think it can help me to build closer friendship with others.

✓ They think it can help me build closer friendships with others.

动词help后面不需要to，且friendship应为复数形式表示多种友谊。

× Secondly, they think sharing is a good uh, good good ability or that I can or can give me a sense of responsibility.

✓ Secondly, they think sharing is a good ability that can give me a sense of responsibility.

句子结构混乱，重复使用“good”，且“or that I can or can give me”不通顺，需简化为“that can give me”。

× Well, there are several kinds of things I would like to share with others.

✓ Well, there are several kinds of things I would like to share with others.

该句无错误，复数使用正确。

× Firstly is my toys.

✓ Firstly, it is my toys.

主语是单数“Firstly”，后面接复数“my toys”，应加主语“it is”使句子完整。

× Secondly, sometimes I will share my meet with a meal with others, umm, so that we can, uh, taste of others.

✓ Secondly, sometimes I will share my meat or a meal with others, so that we can taste others' food.

“meet”应为“meat”，且“taste of others”表达不正确，应为“taste others' food”。

× There are several things that are not suitable for sharing and firstly is the friendship because nobody want to want their friends to play well with others and don't play with them which will makes them feel lonely and isolated.

✓ There are several things that are not suitable for sharing, and firstly is friendship because nobody wants their friends to play well with others and not play with them, which makes them feel lonely and isolated.

“nobody want”应为“nobody wants”，主谓一致错误；“makes”应对应单数主语“which”，且句子结构需调整。

× Yes, recently I have something to share with others on.

✓ Yes, recently I have something to share with others.

句尾“on”多余，应删除。

× Firstly, umm, I travel, travel abroad, so I buy some gifts to my friends and this was what I want to share with my friends.

✓ Firstly, umm, I traveled abroad, so I bought some gifts for my friends and this is what I want to share with them.

描述过去发生的动作应使用过去时态“traveled”和“bought”，且“buy some gifts to”应为“buy some gifts for”。

× Secondly, I learned to cook a dinner and I really want to share with my friends. Let them uh, taste.

✓ Secondly, I learned to cook dinner and I really want to share it with my friends so they can taste it.

“cook a dinner”应为“cook dinner”，且“Let them taste”不完整，需补充完整句子。

× Well, I think the first person I would like to share good news with is my parents because parents takes a really important part in my life and they are always my role model.

✓ Well, I think the first person I would like to share good news with is my parents because parents take a really important part in my life and they are always my role models.

“parents takes”应为“parents take”，主谓不一致；“role model”应为复数“role models”。

× Well, there are several kind of news that I share with my friend on Firstly is, uh, that my, I get good scores and in the final exam, uh, so that I was so excited that I will share with my friends.

✓ Well, there are several kinds of news that I share with my friends. Firstly, I got good scores in the final exam, so I was so excited that I shared with my friends.

“kind”应为复数“kinds”，“friend”应为复数“friends”；时态应统一为过去时“got”和“shared”。

× Uh, secondly is that I attend a reputable university. Uh, I will also share with my friends to.

✓ Secondly, I attended a reputable university. I also shared this with my friends.

时态应为过去时“attended”和“shared”，且“share with my friends to”表达不正确，应去掉“to”。