Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more concise and directly address the question. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and focus on sharing specific examples related to sharing. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, my parents taught me to share from a young age. For example, they encouraged me to share my toys and books with my friends whenever they needed them.

Sugestão: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'I would love to share'.

Exemplo: I usually share my notebooks with friends who miss classes, so they can catch up on lessons. Additionally, I often share snacks with them during breaks to show my support.

Sugestão: Focus on clarity and grammar. Use complete sentences and avoid vague phrases like 'certain person items'. Also, explain your points clearly with proper linking words.

Exemplo: Personal items such as clothes or towels are not suitable for sharing because they can spread infections. For instance, sharing clothes when having a skin allergy might transmit the condition to others.

Sugestão: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Avoid redundancy and ensure your answer is grammatically correct. Use linking words to explain the situation better.

Exemplo: Recently, I shared my saree, a traditional garment, with a friend who needed it for an important event. I was happy to help her by lending it.

Sugestão: Make your answer more fluent by using correct prepositions and sentence structures. Also, avoid repetition and use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I would first share good news with my parents because they are very important to me. After that, I would tell my close friend who always supports and wishes me well.

Sugestão: Use singular/plural forms correctly and improve sentence coherence. Avoid vague phrases and explain why sharing news strengthens your friendship.

Exemplo: I share various types of news with my friends, whether good or bad. For example, I tell them about events at school or in the country, which helps strengthen our friendship.

× Yes, my parents are really disciplined and well mannered and they have taught me uh, well, discipline and sincerity since my childhood and they have also taught me to share the things to your friends or any person if they need.

✓ Yes, my parents are really disciplined and well-mannered and they have taught me, well, discipline and sincerity since my childhood and they have also taught me to share things with friends or anyone if they need.

The phrase 'well mannered' should be hyphenated as 'well-mannered' because it is a compound adjective describing 'parents'. Also, 'share the things to your friends' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'with' not 'to', and 'your friends' should be 'friends' to maintain consistency in pronoun use.

× I like to share my notebooks to my friends.

✓ I like to share my notebooks with my friends.

The verb 'share' is followed by the preposition 'with' when indicating the person receiving something. Using 'to' is incorrect in this context.

× If they were absent and they need a help about this subject or any assignment, I would love to share my assignment to them and I would love to support them.

✓ If they were absent and they need help with this subject or any assignment, I would love to share my assignment with them and I would love to support them.

The phrase 'a help' is incorrect because 'help' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article. Also, 'share my assignment to them' should be 'share my assignment with them' due to correct preposition usage.

× For an example, I would love to share my food to my friends while eating snacks.

✓ For example, I would love to share my food with my friends while eating snacks.

The phrase 'For an example' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'For example'. Also, 'share my food to my friends' should be 'share my food with my friends' because 'share' takes 'with' as the preposition.

× Certain person items and not suitable for sharing due to the health concern.

✓ Certain personal items are not suitable for sharing due to health concerns.

'Certain person items' is incorrect; it should be 'Certain personal items'. Also, the verb 'are' is needed to agree with the plural subject 'items'. 'Health concern' should be plural 'health concerns' to generalize the idea.

× For an example, if I have a skin disease like allergy and I share my clothes to my friends and it will transmit it to her as well.

✓ For example, if I have a skin disease like an allergy and I share my clothes with my friends, it will transmit to them as well.

'For an example' should be 'For example'. 'Share my clothes to my friends' should be 'share my clothes with my friends'. Also, 'transmit it to her' is awkward; 'transmit to them' is better to match plural 'friends'.

× So it is really important and necessary to remind ourselves and to not share the things with.

✓ So it is really important and necessary to remind ourselves not to share things with others.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'to not share the things with.' It needs an object after 'with', such as 'others'. Also, 'to not share' is better as 'not to share' for correct infinitive placement.

× Yes, recently I have shared my saree which is a traditional cloth of our country and my friend needed because of her because she has to go somewhere else so I have shared the things.

✓ Yes, recently I shared my saree, which is a traditional cloth of our country, because my friend needed it as she had to go somewhere else, so I shared it with her.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'I have shared' is acceptable but 'my friend needed because of her' is incorrect; it should be 'because my friend needed it'. Also, 'I have shared the things' is vague; 'I shared it with her' is clearer.

× The first person would definitely go to my parents, the most important person of my life, and I would share the good news for them.

✓ The first person I would definitely go to is my parents, the most important people in my life, and I would share the good news with them.

The sentence structure is awkward. 'The first person would definitely go to my parents' is incorrect; it should be 'The first person I would definitely go to is my parents'. Also, 'share the good news for them' should be 'share the good news with them'.

× Secondly, my friend who is really good of mine and she want all the good wishes for me.

✓ Secondly, my friend who is really good to me and she wants all the good wishes for me.

'Good of mine' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'good to me'. Also, 'she want' should be 'she wants' to agree with third person singular subject.

× There are many news that I share with my friend, especially bad or good.

✓ There is much news that I share with my friends, both bad and good.

'News' is an uncountable noun and takes singular verb 'is' not 'are'. Also, 'many news' is incorrect; 'much news' is correct. 'My friend' should be plural 'my friends' to match context.

× Whatever I have heard about the country or the school or any event, I would love to share the news to my friends because it helps us our bond.

✓ Whatever I have heard about the country, the school, or any event, I would love to share the news with my friends because it helps strengthen our bond.

'Share the news to my friends' should be 'share the news with my friends' because 'share' takes 'with'. Also, 'helps us our bond' is incorrect; it should be 'helps strengthen our bond' or 'helps our bond'.