Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: Yes, my parents taught me the importance of sharing when I was a child. They encouraged me to share food and toys with others, which made me feel happy and connected to people.

Sugestão: Bạn nên tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "affordable" trong ngữ cảnh này và câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn.

Exemplo: I like to share food and toys with others because they are easy to give. For example, I often share snacks and tea with my friends, and special gifts with my relatives, which makes me feel happy.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có một số lỗi từ vựng như "rivet" không phù hợp. Bạn nên dùng từ chính xác và câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn.

Exemplo: I think we should not share sensitive or confidential information, like personal details or negative stories, because it can cause problems if shared carelessly.

Sugestão: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp như "shares" nên là "share" và câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lặp từ.

Exemplo: No, I haven't shared anything personal recently because I prefer to keep my life private. This helps me feel secure and focus on myself.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như "roughly". Bạn nên dùng từ phù hợp và câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: The first person I would share good news with is my mother because she cares about me a lot. I respect her and value her support and encouragement.

Sugestão: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lặp từ.

Exemplo: Honestly, I rarely share news with my friends, even small daily stories, because I don't feel comfortable. Instead, I usually talk to my family first when I want to share something.

× Moreover, they also encourage me to share foods or toys for other people.

✓ Moreover, they also encourage me to share food or toys with other people.

The modal verb 'encourage' is correctly used, but the preposition 'for' is incorrect here. The correct preposition is 'with' when talking about sharing something with others. Also, 'foods' is generally uncountable in this context, so 'food' is preferred.

× Moreover, they also encourage me to share foods or toys for other people.

✓ Moreover, they also encourage me to share food or toys with other people.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used here. When sharing something with others, the correct preposition is 'with'. Also, 'food' is usually uncountable, so 'food' instead of 'foods' is appropriate.

× I personally like to share foods or toys with others because they are very affordable and don't cost much.

✓ I personally like to share food or toys with others because they are very affordable and don't cost much.

The word 'foods' is generally uncountable when referring to types of food in general. Using 'food' is more natural and grammatically correct in this context.

× You know, maybe I would like to share some snacks and teas with my friends or and sometime when I have some special thing I usually share with my relatives.

✓ You know, maybe I would like to share some snacks and tea with my friends, and sometimes when I have something special, I usually share it with my relatives.

The conjunctions 'or and' are incorrectly combined; only one conjunction should be used. Also, 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Teas' is better as 'tea' in this context. 'Some special thing' is better as 'something special', and 'share with my relatives' needs an object 'it' for clarity.

× From my point of view, we shouldn't share some sensitive, rivet confidential information such as personal information, other people's stories or something negative because it can lead to bad consequence if we talk wrongly and carelessly.

✓ From my point of view, we shouldn't share some sensitive, private confidential information such as personal information, other people's stories, or something negative because it can lead to bad consequences if we speak wrongly and carelessly.

The word 'rivet' is incorrect here; 'private' is more appropriate. Also, 'bad consequence' should be plural 'bad consequences'. The verb 'talk' is better replaced with 'speak' in this formal context. Commas are added for clarity.

× No, I don't want to shares anything related to myself with other people.

✓ No, I don't want to share anything related to myself with other people.

The verb 'shares' is incorrectly conjugated for the first person singular subject 'I'. The correct form is 'share' without 's'.

× I want to keep my life secret, to protect myself, personality and belongings.

✓ I want to keep my life secret, to protect myself, my personality, and my belongings.

The nouns 'personality' and 'belongings' need possessive pronouns 'my' to clarify ownership.

× I feel very comfortable and secure when it comes to a place no one knows about me.

✓ I feel very comfortable and secure when I am in a place where no one knows about me.

The phrase 'when it comes to a place' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'when I am in a place'. Also, 'where no one knows about me' is clearer than 'no one knows about me' alone.

× Actually the first person I would like to share my good news that is my mother because she roughly cares my life.

✓ Actually, the first person I would like to share my good news with is my mother because she roughly cares about my life.

The sentence is missing the preposition 'with' after 'share my good news'. Also, 'roughly' is incorrect here; possibly 'really' or 'deeply' is intended. Additionally, 'cares my life' should be 'cares about my life'.

× My her support and encouragement mean a lot to me.

✓ Her support and encouragement mean a lot to me.

The phrase 'My her' is incorrect; only one possessive pronoun 'Her' is needed.

× Honestly, I rarely share something with my friends, even smaller or daily stories because I don't feel comfortable and secure when I talk with them something about me.

✓ Honestly, I rarely share anything with my friends, even small or daily stories, because I don't feel comfortable and secure when I talk to them about something related to me.

'Something' should be 'anything' in negative sentences. 'Smaller' should be 'small' to describe stories. The phrase 'talk with them something about me' is incorrect; it should be 'talk to them about something related to me'.