Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문법 오류와 어순을 고치고, 보다 자연스러운 표현과 연결어를 사용해 답을 명확히 하세요. 예를 들어 시제·동사 형태(‘suggest’→‘suggested’, ‘suggest me’→‘told me to share’)와 부정확한 문장(‘I learned that I realize…’)을 수정하고, 이유를 덧붙여 설명해 주세요. 답은 2~4문장으로 간결하게 유지하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, they did. My parents often told me to share snacks and toys with other children when I was young, because they believed it would help me make friends. As a result, I learned that sharing can make people happier and strengthen relationships.

Sugestão: 불필요한 중복을 줄이고 복수·관사 사용을 정확히 하세요(‘delicious food’는 가능하지만 ‘with’ 뒤 위치 수정). 또한 이유를 연결어로 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 구체적인 예시를 하나 더 들면 좋습니다.

Exemplo: I like to share delicious food, especially with close friends, because eating together lets us express our feelings and brings us closer. For example, I often share homemade snacks with my best friend when we hang out.

Sugestão: 문장 구조와 관사 사용을 고치고 예시를 더 자연스럽게 나열하세요(‘private items are not suitable for sharing’). 이유를 간단히 덧붙이고 연결어를 사용하세요.

Exemplo: I think private items are not suitable for sharing, such as underwear or a toothbrush, because they are hygienic and personal. People usually avoid sharing such things to protect their privacy and health.

Sugestão: 시제와 주어·동사 일치를 바로잡고 문장을 간결하게 만드세요(‘I shared breakfast with my sisters this morning’). 감정이나 구체적 이유를 연결어로 명확히 표현하세요.

Exemplo: Yes. This morning I shared my breakfast with my sisters because we weren't very hungry. It tasted better because we enjoyed it together and chatted while eating.

Sugestão: 조건문과 시제 표현을 자연스럽게 고치고 중복을 줄이세요(‘she always supports me and wants me to do my best’). 이유를 한두 문장으로 정리하세요.

Exemplo: If I received good news, I would tell my mother first because she always supports me and wants me to do my best. Sharing happy moments with her feels natural and makes me feel appreciated.

Sugestão: 문장 연결을 부드럽게 하고 예시를 더 정확한 표현으로 바꾸세요(‘news about celebrities or popular places’). 한 문장으로 합쳐 자연스럽게 말하세요.

Exemplo: I usually share fun and interesting news with my friends, such as stories about celebrities or information about trendy places we'd like to visit. We often discuss these things when planning outings or talking online.

× Yes they did.

✓ Yes, they did.

No grammar change needed; added comma for natural speech pause. (This is punctuation, not in list, so minimal change.)

× They always suggest me to share such as snack or toys with others.

✓ They always suggested that I share things such as snacks or toys with others.

Incorrect verb pattern: 'suggest' requires a that-clause or gerund structure and past tense 'did' indicates past context. Use 'suggested that I share' or 'suggested sharing'. Also plural 'snacks' and 'things' are appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'suggested that I share snacks or toys with others.'

× I learned that I realize sharing is make people more happy.

✓ I learned and realized that sharing makes people happier.

Run-on and incorrect verb forms: 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular noun 'sharing' (subject-verb agreement/third person). 'More happy' is unidiomatic; use comparative 'happier'. Combine 'learned' and 'realized' or choose one. Suggestion: Use 'sharing makes people happier.'

× I would like to share with delicious food with others, especially with close friend because we can share our emotion together and make our relationship become more strong.

✓ I would like to share delicious food with others, especially with close friends, because we can share our emotions and make our relationship stronger.

Wrong repetition 'share with delicious food with'; remove extra 'with'. 'Close friend' should be plural 'close friends' when general. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' and 'become more strong' is awkward: use adjective 'stronger'. Suggestion: 'share delicious food with others, especially with close friends, because we can share our emotions and make our relationship stronger.'

× I'll say something private item is not suitable sharing with others such as underwear or toothpaste because it's too private.

✓ I'd say private items are not suitable for sharing with others, such as underwear or a toothbrush, because they're too personal.

Use conditional contraction 'I'd'. 'Something private item' is ungrammatical; use plural 'private items'. 'Not suitable sharing' needs 'not suitable for sharing'. 'Toothpaste' is typically shared; 'toothbrush' is better as an example. Pronoun agreement: use 'they're' for plural items. Suggestion: 'Private items are not suitable for sharing.'

× Yes, this morning I share my breakfast with sisters.

✓ Yes, this morning I shared my breakfast with my sisters.

Past time expression 'this morning' requires past tense 'shared'. Add possessive 'my' before 'sisters'. Suggestion: Use past tense to match time adverbial.

× We share that because we was not too starving, but it was more delicious because we eat together.

✓ We shared it because we were not very hungry, and it tasted better because we ate together.

Maintain past tense: 'share' -> 'shared', 'was' -> 'were' for plural 'we'. 'Too starving' is unnatural; use 'very hungry'. 'Eat' must be past 'ate'. Use 'tasted better' for food. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense and correct verb forms.

× If I get some good news I would definitely tell my mom first because she always support me and she always want me to be best so I want to let her know my good news.

✓ If I get some good news, I would definitely tell my mom first because she always supports me and always wants me to be the best, so I want to let her know my good news.

Third person singular requires -s: 'supports' and 'wants'. Add articles and commas: 'be best' -> 'be the best'. Suggestion: Add -s for third person singular verbs and include articles where needed.

× I usually share fun and interesting news with my friends. Such as superstar or some hot place where we want to go.

✓ I usually share fun and interesting news with my friends, such as news about a superstar or a popular place where we want to go.

Sentence fragment 'Such as...' should attach to previous sentence. Add articles 'a' and clarify 'hot place' to 'a popular place'. Suggestion: Combine into one sentence and use appropriate articles.