Movies— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Та илүү тодорхой, товч бөгөөд байгалийн хариулт өгөх хэрэгтэй. Илүү сайн холбоос үг ашиглаж, санаагаа илүү логик байдлаар илэрхийлээрэй.

Exemplo: I rarely watch movies these days because of my academic pressures. Therefore, I don't have enough free time to enjoy movies comfortably.

Sugestão: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, логик холбоос үг ашиглан, илүү цэгцтэй, ойлгомжтой болгоорой. Илүү нарийвчилсан жишээ оруулж, үгсийн сангаа өргөжүүлээрэй.

Exemplo: I usually watch drama movies, especially romantic ones. They give me ideas about my own dating life, and afterwards, I like to discuss the movie and my feelings with my friends.

Sugestão: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, товч бөгөөд байгалийн хэллэгээр илэрхийлж, жишээгээ илүү нарийвчлан өгнө үү. Холбоос үг ашиглахыг хичээгээрэй.

Exemplo: I prefer watching movies at the cinema because the real atmosphere enhances my emotions. For example, sad scenes feel more touching when I watch them in the cinema.

Sugestão: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, товч бөгөөд логик холбоос үг ашиглан илэрхийлээрэй. Үгсийн сангаа өргөжүүлж, илүү байгалийн хэллэг хэрэглээрэй.

Exemplo: Yes, watching movies in other languages is very useful, especially for learning English. I prefer to watch movies in English because it helps me learn the language while enjoying the film.

× I rarely watch movies currently.

✓ I rarely watch movies these days.

The adverb 'currently' is not typically used with 'rarely'. 'These days' is more appropriate to express the current frequency of an action.

× I really don't have enough time to watch movies in with feeling comfortably without any fear about.

✓ I really don't have enough time to watch movies comfortably without any worries.

The phrase 'in with feeling comfortably without any fear about' is incorrect and awkward. The correct preposition and phrasing is 'watch movies comfortably without any worries'.

× I usually watch movies that about dramas.

✓ I usually watch movies that are about dramas.

The verb 'are' is missing before 'about dramas'. The phrase 'movies that about dramas' is incorrect; it should be 'movies that are about dramas'.

× Uh watching romance romantic movies actually gives me more idea of for idea of my dating life and after watching that I will discuss the movie about with my friends and how I felt and ask how you feel.

✓ Watching romantic movies actually gives me more ideas about my dating life, and after watching them I discuss the movie with my friends, sharing how I felt and asking how they feel.

The phrase 'romance romantic movies' is redundant; 'romantic movies' suffices. 'More idea of for idea of' is incorrect; it should be 'more ideas about'. Also, 'discuss the movie about with my friends' is incorrect; it should be 'discuss the movie with my friends'. The pronoun 'you' should be 'they' to refer to friends.

× I would prefer at the cinema simply because watching movies with a real atmosphere gives me a more sense of feeling about the movie.

✓ I would prefer the cinema simply because watching movies in a real atmosphere gives me a stronger feeling about the movie.

The phrase 'prefer at the cinema' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer the cinema'. Also, 'with a real atmosphere' should be 'in a real atmosphere'. 'A more sense' is incorrect; it should be 'a stronger feeling'.

× For example, such as the sad story about movie in the cinema gives me more sad.

✓ For example, a sad story in the cinema makes me feel sadder.

'Such as' and 'for example' are redundant together; one suffices. 'Sad story about movie' is incorrect; it should be 'a sad story'. 'Gives me more sad' is incorrect; it should be 'makes me feel sadder'.

× Yes, it's very useful especially learning in English and every time I watch a movie I prefer to watching it in English because I I think that saving my time and I focus the learning a new language and also enjoying the movies at the same time.

✓ Yes, it's very useful, especially for learning English, and every time I watch a movie I prefer to watch it in English because I think it saves me time, helps me focus on learning a new language, and also enjoy the movie at the same time.

The phrase 'especially learning in English' should be 'especially for learning English'. 'Prefer to watching' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer to watch'. 'I think that saving my time' is incorrect; it should be 'I think it saves me time'. 'I focus the learning' should be 'helps me focus on learning'. 'Enjoying the movies' should be 'enjoy the movie'.