Science— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 답변이 자연스럽고 내용도 풍부하지만, 문장이 다소 길고 복잡하여 명확성을 높이기 위해 문장을 나누는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 연결어를 사용하여 문장 간의 논리적 흐름을 강화할 수 있습니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoyed science at school because it provided clear and logical answers, which I found very satisfying. Moreover, the scientific principles were often fascinating and sometimes surprising. This strong interest eventually led me to choose electronic engineering as my major at university.

Sugestão: 답변에 중복된 단어('science scientific')가 있어 자연스러운 표현으로 수정이 필요합니다. 또한, 문장 구조를 간결하게 하여 명확한 전달이 가능하도록 개선해야 합니다.

Exemplo: Not recently, as I am currently on a leave of absence. However, when I was attending university, I usually applied scientific principles in my studies.

Sugestão: 답변에 불필요한 망설임 표현('Umm', 'uh')가 많고 문법 오류('principles was were')가 있습니다. 또한, 문장이 명확하지 않고 일관성이 부족하므로 간결하고 정확한 문장으로 개선해야 합니다.

Exemplo: Recently, I have been interested in programming, so I don't want to study science anymore. However, when I was 20, I was obsessed with physics because its principles were fascinating.

Sugestão: 답변이 간결하지만 좀 더 구체적인 이유나 예시를 추가하여 내용을 풍부하게 만들면 좋겠습니다. 또한, 'lead the world'라는 표현 대신 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하는 것이 좋습니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I think science is fundamental knowledge for everyone because our daily lives depend heavily on technology, which is based on scientific principles.

Sugestão: 답변에 불필요한 망설임 표현('Umm')이 포함되어 있고, 질문에 대한 직접적인 답변이 부족합니다. 또한, 'YouTube about IT devices' 대신 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하는 것이 좋습니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy watching science-related content, especially YouTube videos about IT devices like laptops and phones.

× Not recently because I'm currently on a leave of absence, but when I was attending classes at uni, my university, I usually apply those science scientific principles.

✓ Not recently because I'm currently on a leave of absence, but when I was attending classes at my university, I usually applied those scientific principles.

The verb 'apply' should be in the past tense 'applied' to match the past time frame 'when I was attending classes'. Also, 'science scientific principles' is redundant; 'scientific principles' is correct. 'My university' should be preceded by 'at' to indicate location.

× Umm, recently I'm interested in programming so, uh, I don't want to study science anymore, but when I was 20 I was obsessed with physics because principles was were often fascinating.

✓ Umm, recently I'm interested in programming so, uh, I don't want to study science anymore, but when I was 20 I was obsessed with physics because the principles were often fascinating.

The word 'principles' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' not 'was'. Also, adding 'the' before 'principles' is necessary to specify which principles are being referred to.